Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: YOUdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1163
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 385



    Description:
       i was listening to a good freind discribe a time with a woman in a bar where he felt so close to her but never said a word to her


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsYOUdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Aghh again it eludes me ,this reality so unreal , she is dancing again , constant rhythm ,her hips ,even when I close my eyes they are there .she is framed in light . Crimson ,porcelain .perfect illusion. Lina ,her imperfect eyes .I want her near me, want her eyes to be blue her lips to have more color and yet I wouldn’t change her ,couldn’t .she is mine without ever knowing me




    Submitted on 2005-07-22 21:14:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Very good. This had a sensual and lustful undertone. You are happy with this girl, bt have a fantasy of how you could want her as well. It was breif and to the point. Yet still abstract. Not bad, not bad at all.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    67635

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    The annointed one is persecuted. written by MyPeriodical
    untitled written by MyPeriodical
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Quoth The Skies and its limits written by MyPeriodical
    written by Daniel Barlow
    I am a sorry son. written by MyPeriodical
    Human Progression written by ForgottenGraves
    Blues written by TheStillSilence
    written by Daniel Barlow
    untitled written by MyPeriodical
    Two hundred and seven times written by MyPeriodical
    In God's Name written by poetotoe
    Untitled written by _winky_
    Scared written by MyPeriodical
    Sanctimony written by MyPeriodical
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Where is My Ghost written by ForgottenGraves
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Canalizar written by MyPeriodical
    Release written by robbie
    Gone written by MyPeriodical
    Everyone written by poetotoe
    HeroĂ­na written by MyPeriodical
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Broken Promises written by S.A.M.
    Tired Vine written by MyPeriodical
    Stance written by Daniel Barlow
    That Kind of Love Never Brought Me Flowers written by Jazzy
    Comparisons written by MyPeriodical
    Remedies written by MyPeriodical

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry