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IF I WERE MY OWN FATHER!


Author: kittycampbel
ASL Info:    23 male uganda
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Words: 143
Class/Type: Prose /Satire
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Just blank piece for a mind to ponder over.
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how was it?


IF I WERE MY OWN FATHER!



I would dicern my son has but a million of cares
To cause tears to the soul
I would understand my own son
I would never doubt the ability of the young devil
I see in his Eyes
I would never under-fund him
To collapse projects carefully rooted in
ambition and pureplanning
I would be his savior of the soul
By listening, Guaranteeing and providing for his
Every soul need.
I would know this son of mine has friends
Who are girls
And understand!
I would do all I can to avoid him from going to
The farthest city lane
In a care to survive.
I would Educate him richly
To save him from a dark-bright--dim future.

I guess I would do all this.
But I'm not my own Dad.

KC(SAMMY)




Submitted on 2005-07-23 02:20:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  you see when i read the first line of this poem i just knew that this was on of those kittycampbel classics and for sure it is a beauty. look at the first few lines for example
"I would dicern my son has but a million of cares
To cause tears to the soul
I would understand my own son
I would never doubt the ability of the young devil
I see in his Eyes
I would never under-fund him
To collapse projects carefully rooted in
ambition and pureplanning
I would be his savior of the soul
By listening, Guaranteeing and providing for his
Every soul need."

actually as i read the whole poem it made some good sense. this is good boy
| Posted on 2006-07-13 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]
  oh that was gooooood...switching and turning like that! awesome twist...it makes me...sad. melancholy, hopless, yearning. you give me the impression that your dad doesnt do this stuff for you...i must say that is one of the best works ive read in a long time...keep it up

love always-nirvana
| Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by Nirvana | [ Reply to This ]
  yeah good job on reversing roles, this you did well. but i got backtracked on the flow a little. the idea you had was really good, and oh how many times do diffrent people wish what you were wishing in this piece. i enjoyed reading it good job
| Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
  Jeez, if it didn't sound so real, it would be funny!

A nice trip through the things parents really care about, and kids need to do.

Nice and easy to read, well done!

Be Happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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