IF I WERE MY OWN FATHER!
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how was it?
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how was it?
IF I WERE MY OWN FATHER!
I would dicern my son has but a million of cares To cause tears to the soul I would understand my own son I would never doubt the ability of the young devil I see in his Eyes I would never under-fund him To collapse projects carefully rooted in ambition and pureplanning I would be his savior of the soul By listening, Guaranteeing and providing for his Every soul need. I would know this son of mine has friends Who are girls And understand! I would do all I can to avoid him from going to The farthest city lane In a care to survive. I would Educate him richly To save him from a dark-bright--dim future. I guess I would do all this. But I'm not my own Dad. KC(SAMMY) |
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| you see when i read the first line of this poem i just knew that this was on of those kittycampbel classics and for sure it is a beauty. look at the first few lines for example "I would dicern my son has but a million of cares To cause tears to the soul I would understand my own son I would never doubt the ability of the young devil I see in his Eyes I would never under-fund him To collapse projects carefully rooted in ambition and pureplanning I would be his savior of the soul By listening, Guaranteeing and providing for his Every soul need." actually as i read the whole poem it made some good sense. this is good boy | Posted on 2006-07-13 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ] | oh that was gooooood...switching and turning like that! awesome twist...it makes me...sad. melancholy, hopless, yearning. you give me the impression that your dad doesnt do this stuff for you...i must say that is one of the best works ive read in a long time...keep it up | love always-nirvana | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by Nirvana | [ Reply to This ] | yeah good job on reversing roles, this you did well. but i got backtracked on the flow a little. the idea you had was really good, and oh how many times do diffrent people wish what you were wishing in this piece. i enjoyed reading it good job | | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ] | Jeez, if it didn't sound so real, it would be funny! | A nice trip through the things parents really care about, and kids need to do. Nice and easy to read, well done! Be Happy Graeme | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ] | |
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