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IF COULD CHANGE THE PAST?


Author: kittycampbel
ASL Info:    23 male uganda
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Words: 230
Class/Type: Poetry /Being a Teen
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Its all said I have to hear from some one out there. thanks to Eliteskills.


IF COULD CHANGE THE PAST?



I could change my father's role as a farmer
ah-uh Am sick from eating vegetables.
A hunter would do.
I would have a daily assurance of bush meat

If I could change the past
I would wish my uncle's teeth a good shape
They now stick out like a wild boar's
And they ashame our heritage before the world

If I could change the past
I would have good manners, live like a holyone
Having never stepped any ones's toes.
I would never hear my father's comparisons
Of the devil I am,
To the Jesus I am not else where.

If I could change the past
I would not be Samuel the Aristocrat
A philosopher, A thinker because
The more you fathom the more you worry.

If I could change the past
I would not have been a farmer's child
Faithfully raised on greens
Enjoying the daily barefooted walk to the faithful
Village well with poignant memories
I guess..... I wud....
Be Billgates' son
Having servants all over me
Helping me with my Everything
From head to toe.
I would cautiously hide from the press

You really cant do much on the past.
Those are just soo... so dreams of the day
You need to die a little now to have
A better tomorrow.

KC(SAMMY)




Submitted on 2005-07-23 02:48:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It's true.. you can't change the past. We all dream of having a better life at some point I guess.. but when you think about it, there is always someone out there worse off than we are.


I always enjoy reading your pieces. You put so much feeling into them and they have a "realness" .. a sense of reality about them... You share "yourself" and your life with us in your writes.

This was an enjoyable read.
~Sandra
| Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]


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