This is a very powerful piece...It envoked feelings of remorse in me..I believe that there's always going to be that part of us that cries with the victims of such horrific ordeals and there's no way we can just ignore it as though we dont care..I was very touched by this write. It makes one realize how fortunate we are to live in certain places..Moreover, it is not right to assume that things are fine when they are not in some parts of the world, but it goes with the actual goal that fosters that kind of thinking..Apart from me trying to sound vague...This was a beautifully crafted piece..Very moving..Be happy!Nobantu
This is nicely written, but to be honest, it seems a bit light. It might just be my anti-rhyming bias creeping out, but the rhyming structure almost gives it a sing-song feel.
Maybe it's the overuse of the word tear in world of poetry in general. Maybe it's the rhymes. Maybe I just know to many yuppies who cry a single tear and then figure the problem's solved. While I like the sentiment and I think everybody agrees with your feelings here, the poem just feels a little safe.
Then again, maybe I'm just jaded with too much media coverage of atrocities.
Well, I have a particular problem with the word "tear" in poetry, because it's been so overdone and put to infinite uses and a poem built upon such a foundation really is a cliché on top of clichés.
I'm left a bit flat by this if only because it could be shown better and the reader is told everything like a commandment, rather than led to it and able to engage with it and interact. This isn't that kind of poem, and really, there's no wealth of detail here to help me feel what you feel and take the ride with you.
Normally, I'd skip past commenting on a poem like this because I don't like to leave negative comments without anything positive to share, but I owed you a couple and so why not, eh?
Best of luck to you and I'll be back to check out a couple more when I have more time.
Hi Yousef, This is a beautiful piece. Saddens me so. The useless killings going on in today's world. Innocent children exposed to the dangers of terror. You sum it up so right! A silent tear, I wish everyone could understand why the tear is shed. Some don't. You take care, be safe, wanda
this is a very good write, nothing very extraodinary, but simple, and that's what good about it. everybody should shed a silent tear. this violence in the world has to stop. the world needs to understand.
till then the poor souls who died in Sharm El Sheikh, rest in peace. we need to educate more people about this. thank you for writing this....