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    dots Submission Name: THE FIGHT SONG: AN ANTHEMdots
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    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 327
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 647
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2000



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       YOU HAVE TO READ THE INTRO TO GET THE TRUE MEANING, AND THE INTRO BASICALLY HOLDS THE DESCRIPTION FOR THIS, IM JUST TRYING TO GET THE MEEK PISSED, TO RISE ABOVE AND HAVE A BETTER ATTITUDE


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    dotsTHE FIGHT SONG: AN ANTHEMdots
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    It's time to throw up your dukes
    If you get nervous, don't puke
    you'll be ready to face the world
    when I'm done with you

    Acting like a pussy, wipe the tears away
    get pissed at something, if it's me, its ok
    But don't sell yourself short, Don't you dare cry
    People will do that for you, with a million lies
    You're tough, lifes rough, look at reality
    with a "Fuck you, bitch" mentality

    If its parents you cant stand
    then tell em what to do
    without being disrespectful,
    show them whos the bigger man
    Bullies aint nothing but a pitiful excuse
    of a kid trying to cope with life
    so he thinks he's smart, because he inflicts abuse

    beat the piss out that dude, and be rude about it
    walk away and tell e'erbody about it
    "i came, i saw, i hit'em right dead in the jaw"
    from ludacris, i heard you want what with me?
    I done told you one time, bitch dont fuck with me

    its the killer attitude that you
    have to get used to
    aint nobody can do it, only you
    so you may be sensitive, its society or you
    you have to decide, is it them or you?
    you can turn to the notebook
    but what good is that gonna do you
    but let words come out, describing you
    put on your bulletproof vest,
    take these words outta context
    its time to bow up and flex

    this aint nothing but a "pussy meter" test
    Now i can pass the test with nothing but a guess
    Let me hear say it one time for me
    the national anthem, for soldiers that believe
    that they come up from whats gotta him down
    tell me who runs this town
    throw up your middle finger,and get bucked up
    and tell reality, you aint gonna get me
    do me a favor, and shut the fuck up!!!




    Submitted on 2005-07-23 12:43:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ""i came, i saw, i hit'em right dead in the jaw"
    from ludacris, i heard you want what with me?
    I done told you one time, [censored] dont [censored] with me"

    "throw up your middle finger,and get bucked up
    and tell reality, you aint gonna get me
    do me a favor, and shut the [censored] up!"

    I think these parts pretty much summed up the entire rhyme. Nicely done kid. This could definitely get some people pissed, but I have a feeling that is your intention, if it means they learn to stand up for themselves. Overall, well done. Hannah
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought that this was really well written.. it flowed so well and it was almost less poem and more song.. but i guess songs are just like poems just with music behind them.. you really have a grasp on your rhyme scheme so it never came off as forced. great job.

    ~*~amber~*~
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by rocknpoetrychik | [ Reply to This ]
      yo it felt good 2 get that out didn't it. yea i bet it did. u cuss like pj. good write. i couldn't always stay with the flow but i bet u know what ur doin.

    holla back
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      nice, this was good, all u rapper people are really good. I love it, this was really idk. it was just great, words cant describe! keep it up, ur good at this, one of my favs no doubt.
    Luv u! mwah!
    -suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      it muct be a Louisiana thing. we are the deep south, [censored] FL. ain't nuthin in Florida but a bunch of european pussies. LA is the south! we started this [censored]!

    see what i'm sayin how the forum helps you improve. this was a straight up rant on how people let themselves get stepped on everyday and it doesn't have to be that way. "at the end of the day, you don't have to look anybody in the mirror but your god damn self; its up to you how you look when you finally decide to man up and look into that mirror."~P.J.
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey! This was pretty good stuff. It's time for people to take a stand. There was a good message in here and you put it out in what I think was a damn good way. Once you confront a bully 9 times out of 10 they'll back down, because they typically are nothing more than pussies! I respect your writing and am anxious to keep reading. You do a great job keeping it real. It's good that you're not afraid to speak your mind and keep it real! Great job and don't stop!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]


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