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    dots Submission Name: A Painful Remarkdots
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    Author: mastermike
    ASL Info:    16/M/NC
    Elite Ratio:    2.68 - 24/31/6
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 827
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 874



    Description:
       This describes how one wrong thing said can trigger depression and cutting. Let me know what you think


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    dotsA Painful Remarkdots
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    Suddenly someone says the wrong thing
    Then like nails pain comes down on my chest
    I feel the pain, the pain is hard to digest
    It stings beyond any other sadness
    Thoughts rush to mind
    Telling my emotions to stop this madness
    Although the pain fails to cease
    There's only one other remedy I know
    All I need is a knife to make the crease
    To replace the emotional with physical
    I know all of this is just chemical
    Pulling out the knife,
    I think of where to place it
    In the easiest of places I decide
    The blade presses down and the skin subsides
    Relief, freedom, and carelessness takes over
    Needing more, the blade moves with pressure
    All the pain releases in it's liquid form
    Finally I am back to how I was
    Before the sadness took over




    Submitted on 2005-07-23 16:16:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Cutting isn't something one plans. At least for me it just happens I lose control and I'm watching myself cutting my arm. I like this poem, even though its the angst stuff and what nots. To me (( personally )) as a cutter I do know how it feels. THe same emotions of the cuts which seem to bleed (( excuse the pun )) out the emotions til one feels better. Really I think the author should leave out what happened as that is the past. Its what happened afterwards that matter the most.
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by acommoncold | [ Reply to This ]
      "cut my nose off, despite my face." these mutilation poems are a disgrace. your scars are somekind of fad, just to prove you are mad.
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by splifford | [ Reply to This ]
      no mention of the said offense you need to make it part of the poetry to convey a true sense of emergency
    though i liked it alot
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      I think something should have came before the first line... It seems like you just start out of no where
    Its good though, other than that
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      I can super relate to the beginning of the poem. You are vague in what the wrong thing is, and you express your emotion. But then ending of it... i just cannot relate to. I am sure there are some who can but, I'm not one of them. And physical stuff doesn't make me how I was before the sadness.
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by BeautifulGrace | [ Reply to This ]


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