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    dots Submission Name: Twisted Emotion dots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       MY VERY BESY FEIND WROTE THIS Jay Mali he has alaways had a way of touching me with his writieng he is a lil rusty and has not written anything in some time so when he wrote this i thought it would be good to get some feed back thanks

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    dotsTwisted Emotion dots

    When we first found each other I felt free and new
    You have laid waist to my newfound peace
    How come my entire heart could not encompass your pain
    When did my strength fall short of the bar
    I cannot give myself again so freely
    You sooth me in my dreams and comfort me in sobriety
    And with your nails dug in and our souls entwined forever
    you left me broken and small
    SoWhy cant I hate you
    She who captured my profound attention from the beginning
    Enchanting me with your soft beauty and sincere concern ..I love you
    You have calmed a storm building out of control inside me. Ive become a man with you
    The void I feel now cannot be filled the cracks and craters will never be made smooth again
    So with all this pain is this love
    I never had a choice.

    Submitted on 2005-07-23 18:25:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I get what you're, well he's saying. I mean, it's happened to me too. I think it could give a little more detail, just to make you understand it better. But I think it's beautifully written. Great word usage. I can definately relate.
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by HECATE_Sservant | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this piece, even though I haven't felt that kind of emotion yet, it feels familiar, or something. I'm not quite sure how to describe it. I think that it brings out my empathy. Which is good. Overall, I really liked this piece, and hope to hear more of it.
    Regards Kalinda
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by Kalinda | [ Reply to This ]

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