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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I had a best freind for many years my one and only girlfreid as they are harder to keep then guy freinds because i think we are the nastier sex we are snaeky and maybe a lil to deep any way turns out she was better freinds with my husband hmmm who new now they are both my exs she fell into a diffrent life after we split ...


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    Like fruit that rots on the tree . You are wasted .An amazing gift lies sleeping. And life slips through the tunnel, burns in the ashtray . I may never see a perfect sunset , or swim in an endless sea. But I have loved an angel .watched her laugh heard her scream .I give her hand to all the others to taint her colors and break her fragile wings. I will not hold back her demons . Her fight is all her own . And I will brush the ash from her face when its all over .I will be there while you crawl. Turn from the heat beloved . Find the truth in all the fog

    IN DEEPEST DEDICATION:ALLISON




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      That's really sad, nobody deserves that, though i do agree with your theory, friends that are girls are always causing more trouble. Anyway, I liked your writing, I feel like though you are angry at her, you feel sorry for her, the path that she's chosen. And I like that, it shows that you have a really good heart, even in the toughest of times. Good luck, and keep it up
    Regards Kalinda
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by Kalinda | [ Reply to This ]
      that was so0o0o0 good and im sorry that she did that, i would kick her trampin ass. you dont deserve that, no one does. omg that pisses me off, i wanna kick her ass. she is not worth being a friend and he aint worth your love if them two r gonna do that to you, they are just no good, dirty [censored]faced pigs...wow i never said that before!lol! anyways good luck. i hop eu feel better.
    -suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was deep! I'm sorry to hear that happen to you. I gather you still dislike this woman. And you are hoping she get what's due her. Am I close? I liked this poem alot. Your use of imagery was great. Your flow was great. I think you did good.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      very nicelly said i like reading poetry as i read i ty to place myself in the mind of the writer as well as the characters they talk about
    very enjoyable read
    thanx for you comment on identity it is a very deep poem it talks about the pesonalities in me when i sit down to write
    thanx again sandman
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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