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    dots Submission Name: it runs in the familydots
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    Author: bluesoxz
    ASL Info:    16fohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 71/101/38
    Words: 318
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsit runs in the familydots
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    push it deeper in bring
    it the edge and walk
    off..The balcony is not
    steady cant walk
    On A shaky beam.

    Everything I ever thought
    Has drifted Off to where
    No one can see.
    The mouth of a lion is
    Very sharp just like a
    Blade to my skin..

    No one ever quits No
    one ever wins the quest
    of living...Everything
    Seems so abstract and
    Cloudy or maybe its
    Just me.

    My foot prints dig deep
    into the sand..No better
    Then the dirt on your
    shoe no less then the
    spit on the ground..

    Everything I feel has been
    Transformed to be frozen
    Along with my thoughts and
    Actions.Same with the
    Words I speak each and
    Everyday but no one remembers.

    My touch is like a ghost no
    one can feel it.My toung is
    Split in half because I just
    Cant find the right words to
    say.Just an other fuck up
    in the family as they would
    Say.

    Just an other abuser to mankind
    Just like the one I fear my
    Father I am him..What I hate
    Is what I become. There right
    They always were I am nothing
    more then just trash to the
    Garbage can..So toss me away.

    Just like my mother an other
    Addict.Im addicted to
    Addiction...Trapped down to
    There ways I will never brake
    There chains..
    I to will be screaming inside
    The crazy house.

    It all runs in the family
    And Im a good example
    Of this theory.
    See me as I become them.
    It runs in the family.






    Submitted on 2005-07-23 20:58:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can relate to this poem extremely. This poem holds much emotion and i felt it while reading it. The key words you used worked on bringing the poem together. Great work. Thi will be one of my favourites:)
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by majorrisingstar | [ Reply to This ]
      this was i believe also very powerful. i loved how you went from the world as a whole to your parents and keeping them in the same context. i felt emotion so much that i actually read it twice, this might end up as one of my favs i enjoyed it that much. the only thing i could think is maybe turned it around last verse first and so on
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      Very powerful and emotional. Deep and dark. You know how to express your self so good with words. Another fine poem. I'm just sad to see you so sad and in pain. Keep writing, continue to release those negative feelings using your poetry.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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