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    dots Submission Name: lostdots
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    Author: snufthepunk28
    ASL Info:    21/f/ak
    Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 244/178/68
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 945
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    Bytes: 1165



    Description:
       it simple is how i feel.


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    dotslostdots
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    Lifeless, walking through these thoughts jaded memories.
    A week of silence that isnít enough still wondering but never truly lost.
    I have so much to prepare for and do.
    My heart and soul are broken and I can not breathe.
    I do not know what is breaking me.
    I want to curl up and cuddle to break this chain that I am bound by.
    To share this moment, with someone who can share such scared special moment such as these.
    I wonít allow myself too though.
    I want to be lost in this anguish. To better embrace its simple poetry.
    I am absorbed and in love with my own brokenness.
    I want to lay in my bed and cry.
    I want to weep to God and feel him tenderly wipe the tears away.
    I want Him to kiss my face and tell me what is taking place inside of my soul.
    Too soon all of this will pass by.
    Once the emotionally part has kindly parted, the understanding will still be left lacking for quite sometime until the things which are changing are complete.
    My mind grieves for how long this well take, yet it most be done.
    On the ship I shall be until then.




    Submitted on 2005-07-23 22:10:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      True.. seems people have an age of confusion ; / but don't let that get you down and don't try and not do anything to not get outta what u feeling right now... Get help, i think, to someone you may trust and you know will neva' blabber, it helps... as long as the "friend" neva leaves... or if u don't want to take that risk, just, I don't know... I myself haven't figured that out yet.

    A week of silence that isnít enough still wondering but never truly lost. I think could be broken to:
    A week of silence that isn't enough
    Still wondering, but never truly lost
    or
    add some comas or periods(like you did in otehr long lines)
    I liked the way you portrayed your emotion, how you made it in like a sequence.. what you think.. what will happen after.. and what wil happen for now. Good piece i loved it.
    WRITE ON
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by Depdem | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this. i too, am in the "period". lost, confused and will later, sometime, somewhere, gain some knowledge and comfort from this. ah, but can we wait? this explains so much so plainly and it can connect with everyone...i think. well, it atleast connected with me. good write. keep it up.
    take care
    birdy
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by birdy5005 | [ Reply to This ]


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