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    dots Submission Name: A Last Thankyoudots
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    Author: WandWielder
    ASL Info:    21-f-maryland
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 55/62/16
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       To Mr. Osman, My senoir year english teacher


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    dotsA Last Thankyoudots
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    A knowing guide,
    A hand that leads,
    Planting life's immortal seeds.

    You show us distant imagined lands,
    Guiding us with gentle hands,
    Through books and stories world wide read,
    And yet to you we have not said.

    Our thanks and gratitude we have not told,
    Though in our minds we surely hold,
    Found memories of you and of your class,
    Knowledge of literature in bounding mass.

    And so to you with heavy sigh,
    We say solemnly our last goodbye,
    Thank you my friend for being fair and just,
    And teaching kindly with love and trust.






    Submitted on 2005-07-23 22:57:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What is up with everyone having to flow a poem? I mean am I the only semi beatnic here??????? Flowing poems are very very nice but not all poems HAVE to be a flowing one. I felt that you convayed the message of thanks and respect very clearing.

    - Eric "ACommonCold" Chang
    Nickname is a very long story.
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by acommoncold | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a beautiful poem to show your respect and gratitude to your teacher.This shows your deep feelings and appreciation for your teacher.I also think teachers are the most respectful human beings cause they show us the right path and make us better human beings.According to my religion the teacher is your Guru cause He makes you Human and with his teachings he makes your life fruitful and worth living.But i think in today's world it is difficullt to get such ideal teachers.I am happy for you as you have found one.I really liked the line planting life's immortal seeds.This line is very deep and leaves a great impact on the reader.I have really loved this poem.The only thing which i feel is deficient in this poem is the incorrect sequence.You have tried to show in the poem that your teacher does not know about these feelings of yours.You have tried to reflect this feeling in second as well as in third stanza.If i would have been you I would have written about this feeling at only place instead of scattering this.This is my way.But i really appreciate this poem .It is a wonderful piece of art.Well done and keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      well this is refreshing. how wonderful that we can use writing to give back to someone special who has made a difference in our lives. hopefully all of us may be reminded of one special teacher that made a difference. i know i can, especially reading this, it makes me smile to think about my 7th grade math teacher. such a kind man.
    i like how it says what it has to say. both starting and finishing well, you have a wonderful little piece here. keep writing

    -t
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by chalky | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. I thinnk there could be some tweaking so it flows just a little better, but it's a solid piece. I'd look at some word choice and spacing for further effectiveness. I know the poem is supposed to be simplistic, but it miight be nice to incorporate some other feelings as to why this specific teacher meant so much. Maybe contrast him to others. Make a cause for your grievance beyond words like "kindly." If this is an English teacher, I'm sure he would appreciate some stronger wording.
    Having said that, I think you have as great foundation to work with here, and you're touching on a subject that any poet or reader can really relate to. There are always people who we look back on as inspirations of our creativity,; so the subject is packed full of hearty material that I think readers will inevitable relate to. I hope this was helpful. If you make any edits, please let me knoe.
    Ashley
    | Posted on 2005-07-23 00:00:00 | by queendepricate | [ Reply to This ]


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