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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Death
    Total Views: 601
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 695



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    I wanna die, I'll tell you how
    I could slit my right here and now
    why do you hate me so
    why won't you let my blood just flow
    can't you see it needs to go
    thats the only way the pain will go

    You should die, I'll tell you how
    I could split your wig right here and now
    I dont understand why you do what you do
    and if I can understand that then you should to
    You've hurt me for the last time, time to die
    don't ask me why
    dont start to cry
    you've been given plenty chances now its time to fry
    This was the letter that was written right before I died




    Submitted on 2005-07-24 00:56:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It seemed like just another angsty venting poem to me. I am not saying that it didnt need to be written. If it helped you get your feelings out then it served its purpose. But it is not original.
    LeAnna
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really sad...i dont care if it was original...it means alot...and it says alot.a few poerful words ca mean so much...even a few 3 letter words can..this was good...favorite...

    -Suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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