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    dots Submission Name: illest shitdots
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    Author: young p
    ASL Info:    14/m/N.O.La
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 29/31/11
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 730
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       holla at tha kid


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    dotsillest shitdots
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    this young p yeh i stay on the streets
    not sellin weed, just chilling wit my peeps in that eastover where ya see nothin but big body trucks and rovers
    and if u say somethin about me and i don't get at u ya feel
    its u gettin lucky like findin a 4 leaf clover in a cotton field, and if u feel u real i'll body u
    and have ur blood flowin out u like cranberry juice
    so all ya'll boys that think ya'll ill, chill
    cause if i come out im gone go plat like birdman grill




    Submitted on 2005-07-24 01:04:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      sup youngin u gettin betta but u still need 2 work on ur flow and punchlines. u might also wanna make ur verses a bit longer in the future.
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree you need work on ur flow a little. but ur pretty good. hell its better then i could do. maybe ull be better then ur bro and i can make fun of him!hehe! l8r babe-

    Love Always,
    AZak
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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