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"Father" not dad

Author: star_on_fire22
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Fathers... who really needs them? he wasnt there for me ever.. so why must he try to be now? 12 years later...

"Father" not dad

Waltzing into my life,
like you were always there,
like you didnt miss 12 years of my life.
did you really think i could forgive you?
think i would just be your little girl again?
you have not earned the title "dad"
to me you shouldnt even be a father.
but yet you played a part in my birth.
so what was it like,
knowing you had a daughter,
yet never planning to see her.
you moved half way accross the country.
was it to excape the dutys of handling me?
why have you suddenly popped into my life?
just miraculously "finding" me as you put it.
im sorry i am older now and i understand you never wanted me.
so just leave my life.
i was much better off without you.
don't act like you care about those hospital visits i made.
you don't know me,
and you never will,

Submitted on 2005-07-24 07:53:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  now damn fantastic! there is nothing I would change about this...nothing to just is...

This is the first one of yours that i've read that didnt seemed forced...that didnt seem as though you were just trying to write to get praise or writing what you thought the reader wanted to see...this was just pure, honest and blunt...

and you are right...I'm a single mother I had my first child at 16 and I know that it takes a MAN to be a father...anyone can just donate sperm...
| Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  wow i love this piece and i can realte to it so so much. I have had an "absent" father most of my life and when he decided to try and step back in i was as angry as you. I LOVE THE END! great right...and good hits home to so many people! NICE WORK
| Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by bestdeceptions | [ Reply to This ]
  wow.this was really powerful and you have every right to be pissed off at yuo father.put him in his him that.well that is what i think you should do.great write your anger towards him pours out.i love it.
| Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by endmypain | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a great write. I commend you for putting your feelings out there. This reminds me of a poem I wrote called depletion. Maybe you could check it out sometime. I know how you feel. My dad left me when I had just turned 4. Then when I turned 14 he suddenly popped into my life after being gone for ten years. I had a really hard time accepting him back into my life, but now I am glad I did. It took two years and a lot of commitment on his part. I think I will always be sad and angry for the years he missed because of his alcoholism, but I am going to try and cherish the years that I have with him now. I am not trying to make it sound like you don't have the right to be extremely angry and hurt. So what you chose should be what makes you happy. That is just what I decided. :)
Hope you figure things out.
| Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
  yeh that`s reality especially in developed worlds where divorce is the order of the day a goo d work of arts keep it up but remember justice can still be delt with mercy and to err is human but to forgive is divine
| Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]
  I know exactly how you feel my dad left me when I was 1 and then through my life he just kind of calls me every once in a while to pretend like he wants anything to do with me. All he is is a alcoholic loser. But oh well what can you do the world is full of sperm donors. Just pretty much a name for half of the dads in this world. Well keep up the good work
| Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]

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