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Hair Raising

Author: lainie75
ASL Info:    30/f/uk
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Words: 162
Class/Type: Poetry /Comedy
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emm sorry to anyone that may be affended but you gotta laugh i hope lol

Hair Raising

Hair is such a funny thing.
Some people treat it like its bling.
We get it in unwanted places.
Like up our nose and on womens faces.

Hair can make such long eyelashes.
But also give women , scary moustaches.
So we shave , we pluck and we preen.
Then we wax , which makes us scream.

When going bald , don't try and cover it.
As the comb-over look just isn't doing it.
As baldness means to have no hair.
Replaced instead by a shining head,
thats been polished with loving care.

So if you lie and wear a wig.
Don't think your cool , and don't act big.
Cos if the wind blows strong enough.
You'll be left with your head in the buff.

Hair can be what it wants.
layed down flat or big boufonts.
It always seems to get its way.
Thats why we say , I'm having a bad hair day.

Submitted on 2005-07-24 08:40:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hi! So I'm the only one delayed - as usual. lol . Cute very Cute. Just washed my hair and your description fits the result perfectly. Cool bananas - you nail it down every time!
| Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by Aphrodite Dream | [ Reply to This ] must have seen me when I woke up this morning...I mean I had hair sticking out in every direction!
Another good one girl...keep em coming!
| Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by Doris Jean | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this poem. Lainie, where do you come up with this stuff? This is so funny and cute. I finally give in to my bad hair days, I were a cap or a hat! Lainie the wise, what's next? You did good girl.
| Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  Haha so true... hair is just another thing to worry about- I know several girls/guys who are totally consumed with their hair- they'll freak out when it gets old and grey- keep dying it for as long as they can haha. I wish I could change my hair- have a diff color for each day. Then I'd definitely stand out more than I already do haha... Perfect title- I thought it was gonna be spooky but I like your idea much better!
| Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by Emmalee | [ Reply to This ]
  this is such a wonderful look at something so simple.. hair! i adore this poem! it is so cute and true! why would anyone be offended? if anyone did it would be silly to! it made me laugh and now i have a smile for the day! thank you for this poem

feel free to read one of my poems and comment;)
| Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by rocknpoetrychik | [ Reply to This ]
  This is halarious! So true. Darn that hair. Sometimes I envy those people that seem to have perfect hair that moves when you want it to and stays put when you want it to. But they spend a LOT of time primping it. I agree with you on the don't wear a wig thing. People who wear wigs and hair pieces are just covering up their true identity. Great poem. I love It!

- -Caitlin
| Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by Oli | [ Reply to This ]
  haha, that's cute. Oh man, waxing...I want to know who thought that shaving off hair was a good thing. This was funny, and I needed a laugh. Thanks for the laugh!
| Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey Lainie! Hahaha! Thanks for the smile this morning! How did you know I needed one? This is good stuff! Very humorous and nicely written. I have a couple suggestions for you. In the 3rd stanza, the last line, I would take "thats been polished with loving care" and make it into a 5th line so it doesn't "hang" out there. I know you have the 4 line thing going on but the rhyming there would make it work and it would look better. Also, in the last stanza I think "I'm" would sound better than "I". Other than that I just love it! I smiled the whole time! Great poem!

| Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  ha ha ha ha ha! Great stuff, Elaine!

A very good subject to pick on, cos we DO a lot of funny things with your hair.

This was cute, and funny. You managed to bring both sexes into it well. There are a couple of flow glitches, but who cares? You'd only bother fixing it if you want to enter a contest, (this IS the sort of poem that wins contests.)

Very well done!

Be Happy

| Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

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