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    dots Submission Name: PEACEdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       i am trying trying so hard to be clearer so i hope this worked please please comment on this and let me know

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    Blankets of satin , white heat ,glass sweats on a bed side table. There is no brilliant sunset or calm before the storm. It waits .quietly watching. I some times can elude it as I have tonight. But I know it is patient. And soon I will gently lay my weary head in its bony hands….

    Submitted on 2005-07-24 11:30:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh this was just awesome...I think that you have definately proved to me that you are an awesome writer just by this one piece. Congrats my friend...I think you are cool...not saying in any way that my opinion is any superior to anyone else but you know.
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      That's my girl! You did it, I could fully relate to the poem. It is good when we find some peace and hold on to it. You did good here with this poem. Keep them coming.
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really good and discriptive in alot of ways i like it.the only thing you should do is put it into a stanza.other than it was really good.
    well hope to hear from you. keep up th egood work.
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by seven11 | [ Reply to This ]

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