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    dots Submission Name: FORGIVEdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    The quite passion. Embers lie cooling from the night before. Its skin pulled taunt over the mouth of this madness , no spoken word no regret or knowing glance . The act itself is the remedy , and everything can be ok ,for now anyway .till the light creeps in destroying what’s left of the night .the sheets cool as the water runs and the illusion becomes twisted, its magic revealed ……




    Submitted on 2005-07-24 11:32:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is so good. I see you are taking my advice. lol. You made a simple moment look look so serene and sweet. Like before, your imagery is great. Nice flow. Keep it up!
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      the magic of passion maybe?? with the illusion of if its real or not. thats what i seen and with the way you described it using such great words made it a pleasure to read. maybe you could have wrote in a more traditional format or something more exotic than just a plain wrap, but hey either way it will get the credit it deserves, because its not how you present what you say, its WHAT you say and good job doing that
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]


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