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    dots Submission Name: Going On Foreverdots
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    Author: AngelOutlaw
    ASL Info:    21/female/OR & WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 672/392/64
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Nostalgia
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    Description:
       Just something about my freshman year. Best year of my life so far, and I want it back so bad. Tribute to the different friendships of that year, most of which don't exist anymore.


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    Just young enough to be innocent,
    Just old enough to be free.
    One mind in four bodies,
    Planning our next adventure.

    Just old enough to know better,
    Just young enough to believe.
    One spirit in three bodies,
    Working on our next escape.

    Only fourteen, friends for always,
    Only fourteen, make it last.
    Only fourteen, and I love you,
    Only fourteen, make it last.
    Fourteen, going on forever.

    Just young enough to be sincere,
    Just old enough to be brave.
    One heart in two bodies,
    Inseparable, partners in crime.

    Just old enough to be strong,
    Just young enough to have faith.
    One soul trapped in a body,
    Longing to live out her dreams.

    Only fourteen, friends for always,
    Only fourteen, make it last.
    Only fourteen, and I love you,
    Only fourteen, make it last.
    Fourteen, going on forever.

    Look back on the days
    Of innocence.
    Long for a life
    That is pure.
    Hold onto memories,
    Look on ahead,
    Because we're going on
    Forever.




    Submitted on 2005-07-24 12:10:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yes, I agree, freshman year was pretty good. (though soph was better at least for me.) There was one joy you had that I didn't, and that was Devon Davis. But that's all okay now, don't worry, not mad. But that is the main thing that made freshman year such a mass of pain compared to last year. Anyway... I liked the poem lots. Freshman year seems so far away now, this poem makes me feel ooooooold.

    {Kate}
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow you really took me back a few years here! These were the days that I'll never forget-but forget so often that they happened! LOL
    Either way all the self-discovery, realizing who your real friends are/were, boyfriends, parents(don't get me started), etc. etc. it's all a battle at this age. These were the best times of my life though. It's that point in time when you stop being a child and slowly turn into an adult. It's scary and exciting all at the same time. I honestly believe, due to my own experiences, that this point in time truly turns us into who we're going to be as adults. A lot of people disagree with me, but as I said that's due to my own personal experience. This was a very nice read and really helped to take me back to some serious memories.
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      lol who would think that with a laptop and desktop we would comment on the same thing lol, im glad to give you your 300th comment, freshman year... hmm its been many friday nights and many beers since then. but i can vaguely remember it. i do remember being all district in baseball and then blowing my knee up the following summer jumping off a cliff, and i also remember my english 1 teacher boy she was stupid lol... as far as friendships go im a country boy so we didnt really share all that emotional stuff lol, but i liked the way you presented 4 people into one with the same emotions and thoughts. that is what brings this poem out and when you talk of only fourteen... that is something else i liked nice little write
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      a circle of friendship trying to cope with freshmen year in high school. im glad yawll joined together to have fun and get through it. as boys lol we didnt necassarily have the same circle but had the same views, and to this day we still have our friendships, i guess you could say when it comes to boys with boys and girls to girls we are less likely to cut someone else throats lol ;) i really liked this, its a nice way to put something back into high school like this im going into jr year so yeah i still remember my freshman year, once again good job
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a refreshing read. Not only was it lyrics, and thus earning a plus in my book, but it had some poetic qualities as well, such as the juxaposition of the young and old stanzas which I think worked very well. I also liked the fact that it didn't rhyme all the way through and so my favourite part was the last part for holding sucj great potential in a song. The chorus is also nicely created and shows great song potential as well so overall, I'd say you have a pretty solid write, nice one!
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      it was tight how u went from having four souls in one 2 finally being alone. the repition worked well too. did u really lose those three friends? ah just leave it in the past, but sometimes the past is great motivation 4 a really good write.
    ~troy
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      It was a fun poem to read, and yeah it does kind of hold the whole highschool way of life. The friends losing friends gaining others like you said wanting to make it last. And at 14 myself I did feel like I was always borderlined on who or what I was so it was good that you said that as I assume that others most likely feel that way. And I might me wrong here so correct me if you will, but the last stanza seems to me like the person/writer is looking back and wishing they were back at that times?????

    Liked the poem very much.
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by acommoncold | [ Reply to This ]


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