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    dots Submission Name: Come Back To Medots
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    Author: manderz_1207
    ASL Info:    15/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    5.45 - 95/109/38
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
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       Break ups can be rough.. I tried to get away from here and let my mind off from things but I ended up writing about him anyways...


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    dotsCome Back To Medots
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    I know what I feel but still think it can't be real. I've tried and I've tried but what I need to say won't come out. I cannot put into words the thoughts in my mind. The feelings of hurt that you left behind. When I began to think that all was going well you whacked me a good one, and down I fell. I felt that somthing was wrong with me, what did I do? Yet you tell me, "No, it wasn't you." I want to belive you, really I do. Yet in my heart and my mind I just can't seem to. Part of me feels that this isn't what you want to do. If that were the case then why would you, right? Were you afraid of getting too close? Or was there fear you'd find someone you liked most? Pople have to work things out, otherwise what would relationships be about? There about fighting for what you want, what you need. What your heart desires most. Why won't your heart desire me? I want to make this work, I really do. But if times what you want then time I shall give you.




    Submitted on 2005-07-24 14:23:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow emotion poured out of this like water from a fountain. i know excatly how you feel. I've had guys tell me that it was them not or they've changed so its not going to work. i hope that everything works out for you in the love department. Agian i must say even though it was a bad situation this is realy good poem.

    ~Gena~
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
      It sounds like you are hurting bad. Breakups are always painful. I won't critique this because it's like kicking a dog when he already down and this poem is very personal. I can just say it was emotional and heartfelt. My heart is breaking for you! I hope time heals you and you find some peace of mind.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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