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    dots Submission Name: My Salvationdots
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    Author: Samuel Bielz
    ASL Info:    21/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 151/182/46
    Words: 396
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I know, its rather long. However it has several meanings, depending on the reader. this, i think, is one of my deeper pieces. Please, anyfeedback wold be apreciated.


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    Dwelling through the wastelands of sorrow,
    I smell the stench of the fallen angels,
    Though tortured, I am still content,
    My masochism becomes my refuge from the pain.
    Though the hymns of my grief overwhelm me,
    They are hidden from me, and I am tranquilized.
    I am comfortable, manifesting these demons,
    For I feel all the pleasures my flesh thirsts for.
    I pass the Moorish wall to my left,
    And to the right, is my creator's folly.
    I enter the doorway of Lust, and it is beautiful.
    Ah, the beauty of a woman's nakedness.
    The vixens of desire, they all surround me,
    I find myself overcome by my man-like desires.
    The orgy of the demons, and the joy of its act,
    It beckons my mental desecration of the angels.
    The state of oblivian becomes me,
    I have all my mind has dreamed of.

    I survey my atmosphere and fall to my lust,
    I see the nude angels, so beautiful they are.
    But than she catches my eyes like none other,
    Fully clothed, with tears in her eyes.
    I cant bring myself to look away from her,
    Her eyes are reflecting, much like mirrors.
    The reflection I see is most repulsive,
    I see the nakedness of the angels.
    I see the emptiness of my sins,
    and I feel the grief in her heart.
    Her eyes, they show me myself,
    I look at the nude sariphim and I drop dead.
    The image I see is unbearable to witness,
    What is this monster I've become?
    I withdraw from the wickedness I've become,
    I run to my dark valley, with the shadow of death.
    I weap the tears of guilt and repentance,
    Than I hear another crying, an angel.
    I look to my flank and see only beauty.
    I see the fully clothed, weaping angel,
    With the mirrors in her eyes, like a fire.

    Oh, my love, can you forgive me?
    How is it that you open your arms,
    To a wretch such as I?
    What kind of love can this be,
    That you would give me your purity in wedlock?
    For all I have defiled, and all I have done,
    How do you love me so?
    You're beauty is my shelter,
    and your eyes, my salvation.
    Your hands have bought me,
    Your eyes have sold me,
    And I am always to be free.




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      wow incredible imagery very good sam i liked this peice alot. its like this guy is going through life having what he has wanted and than sees something or someone that he wants but cant have unless he changes and sees that the way his life is at this momnet is not good enough for the thing or person he wants. great job...Joy
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      amazing imagery, i like the play of words towards the ends of the first paragraph. i really "see" what you want me to see. i interpreted this poem as a man resisting temptation, he sees all these women, beckoning to him, but after he feels guilty of what he was done, he sees his woman as his salvation and begs for her forgiveness. i like this piece

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    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a beautiful expression. The imagery is incredibly clear, and the words terribly powerful. I interpreted it in two ways: One, a man(guy) who cheated on his wife (whether through a real relationship, or fantasies) and only felt bad and realized his guilt when he saw his wife's sorrow and pain over what he had done, which then brought him to his knees because he remembered the incredible woman she was. Or two, the story of the cross. The writer being a sinner, and the weeping angel being Christ. Either way it was intended, it is a beautiful and powerful write. Well done.
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey hun! I loved this poem. I almost started crying myself when I read it! You are so great, and I love you! :-D Other than Falling to Life, this is my favorite poem I have read so far!
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by countrygirl0261 | [ Reply to This ]



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