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    Author: manderz_1207
    ASL Info:    15/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    5.45 - 95/109/38
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/
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    Over I try to stop the pain within,
    try to hold back my tears of hurt.
    I feel the build up starting to get to me,
    I'm about to break, I can't, I won't!

    What satisfaction will come of that?
    I can't let time repeat itself.
    I can't keep thinking about it,
    keep letting it get to me.

    Why can't I just realize this is it?
    This is how things are suppose to be,
    but then what if there not?
    What is this is just an obstacle,
    for me to overcome.
    Just another challenge to make my life better,
    to make me a better person.





    Submitted on 2005-07-24 16:33:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was a realy good piece. it realy says a lot about you.i think that its best to let your feelings out even if that means you need to cry.I bottle things up and i end up bubbilng over no matter how hard i try not to.Im not saying you need to find someone and spill your entire life story to them but just find a way. But then why am i telling you this.You've found a way to let it out through your writting.The last verse says a lot about you.Just when you want to lay down and say yep this is the way life is supposed to be i best except it you question it. You say to yourself why should i have to except it why cant i change it and you do. You mold your life the way you want it to be. That is a good quality in a person.

    ~Gena~
    | Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
      
    Why can't I just realize this is it?
    This is how things are suppose to be,
    but then what if there not?
    What is this is just an obstacule,
    for me to overcome.
    Just another challenge to make my life better,
    to make me a better person

    this is the way you have to live your life.its not a question.... you have to otherwise society will run all over you, no matter how big or small the obstacle is...i kinda speak from experience. other than a few spelling errors which everybody has committed, this piece lets us know that you fight and claw and i admire that... good job
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]


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