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    dots Submission Name: one daydots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 630
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    Bytes: 522



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    dotsone daydots
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    what did i ever do to you
    you hate me and my creative fist
    In the past I know I ruled you
    But then I freed you, I cut my wrist

    With time that goes by I know we'll fight
    and When that time comes may the best man win
    I'll train untill that dreadfull night
    when our rivallry truely begins

    win or lose, my respect you own
    my time has past, now you are strong
    for I am small and you have grown
    The devils sing a secret song




    Submitted on 2005-07-24 18:43:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      well i am not really sure who you are talking about. All i picked up was a conflict with somebody. What is this poem about? Can i get some background info..it may make it clearer. I agree that it needs work on the flow, but in general i think it has a strong message. The lines that i really liked are

    >you hate me and my creative fist
    >The devils sing a secret song
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by bestdeceptions | [ Reply to This ]


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