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    dots Submission Name: A Letter For Motherdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       m this was written by Shawna Price my sister in regrads to the loss of our mother to cancer it touched me and i love it she is just starting out at this writing thing and would love feed back i personaly dont care for the lay out but thats me thanks


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    dotsA Letter For Motherdots
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    mother i look in the mirror
    and i can still see your face
    i have your eyes,your nose,your smile
    but nolonger have your embrace
    memories of our laughter,and memories of our tears
    memories of our happiness together
    now forgoten in lost years
    mother i have your eyes,but no longer do they see
    the woman who gave me this gift,now gone
    a soul drifting in a sea





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      This was so painful to read. I'm sorry that this happened to you. You have blossomed with this poem. I understood it and I could relate to it. This had a good flow. And your words were heartfelt. It made the poem real to me. Good work.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm sorry. That's a very hard thing to go through. I loved the poem. Very heart-felt and emotional. I love the "I have her eyes, her smile, her nose" Part... HAving to see her in yourself everyday can be rough, to remember her and the good memories though can be good. Nice poem. Hope your doing well.
    ~manda~
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by manderz_1207 | [ Reply to This ]
      omg, im so sorry. its probably very hard, well no it is. this hasnt happened to me but. if i eerlost her id die. this was a touching poem. keep it up. nice work
    -suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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