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    dots Submission Name: TONE AND RYTHEM COMBINEDdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       a good feind of mine years ago would often make fun of the music my best freind and i listened to yuppie music he called it he listened to underground and reall serious stuff we perferred the latest hit on the radio it lead to many heathed discussions and helped to form a awsome freindship with the three of us we debate all the time and i love it

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    Allison moves her toes in time with the music. Its solemn harmonics tickle the mind .Though I can not see it , and I hear it at a loss, I feel it just the same. I cry when my Allison cries, when her lover is sad. I giggle when it is vivacious , and when its speaks of death ,I die.Aghh ……you say we are typical children , pathetic, shallow like the population. I am sorry you are so high to be so low. See it not by choice but circumstance that lures us to these familiar cords. Perhaps you are right and we are simply contributing to a social downfall. Then again it may be society that has failed us. We will continue to listen , continue to feel , and I am certain you wont be down to visit anytime soon. But preach on my beautiful tenor, though it changes nothing but my mood. Our group of outcasts grows. I love to her your words and though they don’t truly reach me they soothe me anyway..

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      I like this...and I like the fact that you like the debates between you and your friends...it shows openess which is a quality that I hold very high...and even though my preferences for music are of the underground persuasion I think that some mainstream music is just as enjoyable, not much but there are exceptions...and nowadays it seems that underground is becoming more popular than mainstream anyways...people tend to not take you seriously if you are pure mainstream...but I could talk about this forever and I'm not gonna...just wanted to let you know I like this...especially the part about Allison moving her toes in time with the music...I think that's an awesome way to start it.
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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