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    dots Submission Name: Walk Awaydots
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    Author: manderz_1207
    ASL Info:    15/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    5.45 - 95/109/38
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Society
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    Bytes: 530



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    dotsWalk Awaydots
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    Drop the bottle and walk away,
    no way in hell I'll let you stay.
    I refuse to watch you waste away,
    all because you didn't know what to say.

    Didn't know how to put up a fight,
    fight for what you knew was right.
    Alcohol gets you nowhere,
    can't you see?

    Don't let yourself become a statistic,
    don't give in to everything your against.
    So put that bottle and take my hand,
    in my car is where you should land.




    Submitted on 2005-07-24 23:49:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Taking control of a drunk person for their own sake. Wish I could have done that, but instead I watched someone I loved get drunk time and time again. Maybe If I was bolder I would have spoken up, and then I wouldn't have to go home in fear of running off the road...And maybe I wouldn't have gotten hurt over and over again...Again very nice job!
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by MurphyGirl44 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this hit home my fathers a drunk and i feel like that alot angry at him giving up seems almost selfish soemtimes thankyou for this it is nice to know your out there writing cant wait to read some more
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]


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