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    dots Submission Name: To Write About Youdots
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    Author: manderz_1207
    ASL Info:    15/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    5.45 - 95/109/38
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 663
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Not a very smooth poem, certainly not one of my best but I just started writing and that's what came..


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    I write and I write all because of you. I can't get you out of my head. Go ahead, write down what your feeling. The problem is I have, and I have again. Different words, but same old feeling. You've came and you've nestled your way into my heart. Yet you give it all up without a good start.

    When things get going you get scared. You break it off now so there's not fear of hurting. I let you choose your way to go, gave you your space, but you still know. I'm here for you, these feelings won't just go away.

    I want to be your greatest friend, but how do I let go of the something more? How am I suppose to be your friend and be with you knowing that we won't be together in the end?

    As I sit and I worry, I know that time will heal all wounds. Now that I've let you go I have to figure out whats next for me. Will I move on and find someone new? Or stand in place where time stands still? Maybe my heart is being true? Maybe in the end I'll be able to be with you.




    Submitted on 2005-07-25 00:00:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thats depressing. I don't even really know what else to say, but I'll keep talking (typing) anyway. Isn't it strange how you can write so many things about one person? I think that how much you miss someone can be described so many times because there isn't just one word that explains it right. I don't know if that makes any sense... it's just what I think. I'm like in love with one of my best friends (we used to go out), so I know what you're saying. The line, "Different words, but same old feeling" really stuck out for me. It's so true. It also kind of reminds me of something I wrote somewhere that said:
    "I must have already written a thousand lines
    In many poems so many times
    But there always seems to be something I left out."
    ...Or something like that. Anyways, I really like this a lot. As usual, Great job

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      I also liked this one! "Or stand in place where times stands still" Nice line there. I guess I am standing in that place where time stands still. Lots and lots of things I liked in this piece, so many lines I find creative in here. Good job!
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by MurphyGirl44 | [ Reply to This ]


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