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    dots Submission Name: And She Knowsdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsAnd She Knowsdots
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    she says she needs him but they know
    they can see it in her smile
    they watch the love inside her grow
    his face dances always in her eyes

    she says she can't stop crying but they see
    they can taste him in her tears
    she cries without him, let her be
    she just needs to make it clear

    she tells herself that she doens't love him
    but she knows
    that if she claimed numbness it would be a lie
    and she is sometimes aware of the love that grows
    she just doesn't understand why




    Submitted on 2005-07-25 01:40:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmmm this is something i can relate to...I feel the same way about a man in my life too...i can pretend that I dont love him but everyone knows the truth...anyhoo thanks for sharing...
    | Posted on 2005-09-30 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      this sounds like a Courtny Love sonnet / i like the poem / it has rhythm to it ./. like you could sing it over a gutar or vialin. good job with the poem here ../. i like the line
    'his face dances always in her eyes'
    thats comes off emotionally-Romatic
    keep up the good work lori !
    JWI
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by J W I | [ Reply to This ]


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