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    dots Submission Name: Simon Peter's Wet Appareldots
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    Author: gavinspikenard
    ASL Info:    20-something/m/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 273/334/104
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    dotsSimon Peter's Wet Appareldots
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    Contrary wind and crashing waves
    Our hearts left hardened from the bread & fish display
    Into the boat we go
    "Of good cheer" we float
    Suggested by our Lord who we thought was a ghost...
    ...walking on the sea

    I said "command me"
    He said to "come"
    My feet hit fluid and I stood my ground in awe
    But with faith in need of weight gain,
    I sunk and cried out to be saved
    Oh so very much afraid...
    ...a doubt where trust should be

    This was my time to experience that "sinking feeling"
    Lesson learned (and served with a side of humility)




    Submitted on 2005-07-25 01:46:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      served with a side of humility

    what a spectacular ending.
    i always liked the story of peter walking on water... the faith that he had before he even got out of the boat and then the looking down... the looking away... the doubt... the sinking... i dont know... it always reminds me that those that we follow in our christian lives werent big amazing people who never stumbled (or sank as the case may be) but that they too were sidetracked and taken out by the very things i struggle with... i dont know... its that that makes the bible easier to read for me... knowing that if god can use them he can use me...

    i think you portray this story well.
    im not sure its the best written piece of yours ive ever read but i do like it.

    hearts hardned by the bread and fish display...

    thats such an interesting way of putting it.
    i mean... ive always wondered why these disciples who walked and lived and ministered with jesus were such cowards sometimes i mean... if i were in their shoes i would prolly be no better but yeah... its crazy that they didnt actually seem to KNOW who it was they were serving you know...?
    and they saw so many amazing miracles... healings... ressurections... feedings and yet somehow they still never seemed to get the point until after jesus died and the holy spirit came but i digress...
    having said that its only fair to say that it seems to be a trend really... the israelites saw so many miracles in the desert... the parting of the sea,... manna from heaven etc etc and even they forgot and turned away from god...
    even though peters 'turning' wasnt a complete denouncement it was a turning of faith all the same...

    and im telling you what you already know

    this is a stunning idea to write about...
    i have a couple of ideas i am contemplating trying to write about... im not sure whether i will or not but if i do ill let you know...

    seriously stunning...
    | Posted on 2006-10-11 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh this was just great...and cute picture by the way...nice touch on it...

    Begging the very Man I removed my eyes from to now save me
    A "doubt" where trust should've been
    Faith in need of weight gain

    I like this part a lot...it makes me sad because I know what you mean and I know that feels like.
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]



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