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    dots Submission Name: DRAMA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!dots
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    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 398
    Class/Type: Rant/What you did
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       there is no need for description, if you want one read "From a boy, to a Man" right now im to pissed to give one. i woke up in the middle of the night to come to my laptop to write this shit..because i had to let it out....otherwise......who knows........ this took about 5 mins max


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    dotsDRAMA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!dots
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    heres another verse for the elite hall of fame
    i wish i had some pussies next to me,
    but for now ill take aim
    little bitches like to get off
    by watching other boys jack off
    if you havent heard the story, dont worry
    because you are now witnessing the murder scene
    10 feet tall and living proof there aint a mothafucka
    who speaks more truth
    with a 6 pack the ladies love, and guns to boot
    can bench 310 with a bottle of heinessy in hand
    "from a boy to a man" that story is over
    now you looking at a real life soldier
    i bet you didnt know that existed,
    but now you know its real
    let me talk to them bitches,
    ill give them the tour of my amitivylle
    because its my life they chose to steal
    come back again and leave looking like minced veal
    typing this shit has got me shaking
    im tired of fools who keep faking
    in that trial with their heads hung low
    back to alexandria, judge please dont make me go
    thats probabally the best prayer
    you could have said
    the shit couldn’t have been played better if its the bible you would’ve read
    think your lucky stars that you aint nowhere in my parish, that you better believe
    because there are hundreds of my bro's friends who would love to get even for me
    i might even commit a crime myself,
    just to get a piece of revenges wealth
    like stealth would be in the cell with you
    seeing you cry for mommy,
    when i get done with you
    not worrying about the click im with
    this is strictly some "us" shit
    i dont ever wanna see a fool in here ever talk about drama with me
    because if i see those faces again, you better hope the guards kill me
    cause i aint never blindfolded, i stay sober
    so when i see your faces again,
    in handcuffs I’ll give the media
    something to drool over
    the headlines of the newspaper will read in bold: Solemnpen did it!! GAME OVER

    if you know me in any way, you’ll know what this is about
    my brothers friend whos a guard just told me, that some bitches
    i got acquainted with just transferred from texas to the boys
    detention center in BR




    Submitted on 2005-07-25 01:50:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i want thosepunk mutha [censored]as to read this [censored]. put a hex on they ass and make you see those [censored]es face to face again. i'm tellin roght now, don't let them [censored]s get away with what they did to you. make em feel it, son~P
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice kiddo. Good read, and I think it's great that you write all of this. You have a ton of strength and courage, and I admire that. Keep it up kiddo. Lata!
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow I really enjoyed this Piece Nice Grammer no real mistakes at all Was str8 to the point and touched on an important subject n feeling at once.All and all a Good read Loved everyline BY the way i'm No Talent check out some of my work sometime
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]
      damn cade, u going al out son. don't let the haters rest. as long as someone adds fuel 2 the fire never retire and keep bringing it til all these [censored]es retire. good job battle rap all star.
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      hey there lil' man! you have courage for using your experience in a proactive manner than in a destructive manner and i admire that...remember what i told you before..."keep on-a-chuggin!"

    i love you,
    christianne
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Again, I love how straightforward you are. It seems like you're ready and willing to face everything head on. So many other people choose to drown in pity and refuse to go on living- yet here you are, refusing to curl up and die! Good for you! Make em pay for what they did-they sure as hell deserve it! You take it easy and keep writing!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]


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