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My Best Friend ...


Author: lainie75
ASL Info:    30/f/uk
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Words: 145
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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this is for my mam who is the rock and support of a wonderful family of which i'm so lucky to be apart of.


My Best Friend ...



You are my very best Friend.
You've been there from the start.
And you'll be there at the end.
You love me unconditionly ,
On you i can depend.
You are my life support.
With lifes lessons you have taught.
I can stand on my own two feet.
But If i need to sit ,
Then you would be my seat.
You are my biggest fan.
And when i want to say i can't.
You always say i can.
You believe in me.
Which always makes me see.
You are my shining light.
And for me you shine so bright.
You always help me Stand.
Reaching out your loving hand.
You'd never let me down.
And when i'm sad you are my clown.
You've made me who i am.
And i'm so proud to say i'll always love you Mam.







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  Awww...I love this so much. you are so so lucky to have a mother like this. So many people these days lose the close relationship they have with their mother.

You are my very best Friend.
You've been there from the start.
And you'll be there at the end.

I really love that part. It is great to know that there will be someone there for you until the end. Great write. I can't wait to read more...

Mikki
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| Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
  Stunning, stunning, stunning! I'll forward you a private on this one. Absolutely true, your prhases caught every beat of my heart.
| Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by Aphrodite Dream | [ Reply to This ]
  Elaine, this is excellent!

Whether deliberate or not, you have written this with a "little girl" feel, in the grammar and the rhyme, and it sets the poem off beautifully.

I sure hope you sent it to your Mum, she'll love it!

Great, happy, and inspirational dedication to a great Mum

Be Happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow I really enjoyed this Piece Nice Grammer no real mistakes at all Was str8 to the point and touched on an important subject n feeling at once.All and all a Good read Loved everyline BY the way i'm No Talent check out some of my work sometime
| Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]
  This is beautiful...it touches me in that it has taken me 37 years to realize that my mother has always been my one true friend - my best friend - and it has taken the last several months since being back closer to home to rebuild our relationship - I showed this to her and told her not my words - not sure I could even come close to something this good - but my feelings...So I thank you because we just finished up a long conversation over coffee and kahlua, she listened as I vented my day at work last night and she cried when I shared this poem with her...it was the first real hug my mom & I have shared in 5 years...
Lisa
| Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
  Lainie, This is such a beautiful trbute to your mom (mam). This so clearly portrays the loving positive influence your mother had on your sense of self and good self-esteem. It is too bad there aren't more mothers like this. The world would be a more peaceful place!

Steve
| Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
  Beautiful, just beatiful. I love this. It showed the tenderness in your relationship with your mother. I wanted to cry because that is a rare kind love...mother and daughter. You showed warmth in this poem. And it was all heartfelt. I love this.
Maggie
| Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  Awww! Lainie, this is just sooo sweet! It is so nice to have someone like this who you can depend on and lean on! I have this kind of relationship with my mom. We are very close and I would be lost without her! This is a really good poem and a special dedication that I am sure she will love! Take care!
Lorna
| Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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