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"Passions' Last Breath"

Author: Martin S. Allen
ASL Info:    33 male
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Words: 104
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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"Passions' Last Breath"

our love was dead
when you lay in his bed
a passions' last breath
that long be at rest
a love betrayed
the memories fade
of love and beauty past
in evenings shroud
i heard the sound
of lovers broken truth
the cuts will soon
reveal the wound
gagged and bound in doom
the blood it leaks
in silence speaks
you were the death of me
they found you dear
in chains of fear
a prison in the deep
a haunting place
no hope no grace
you'll never get away
living with the truth of death
it's just a breath away

Submitted on 2005-07-25 12:47:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  When I read it plays like a movie in my mind. I really seen her broken and haunted by what her actions caused. Really like this poem..
| Posted on 2008-11-11 00:00:00 | by 3TOMANY | [ Reply to This ]
  another example of why i am stalking you.. i think you are one hell of a writer.. amazing how the things we feel come out on paper.. very good.. thanks for letting be a stalker..
| Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by Justmenow14 | [ Reply to This ]
  oh thanx 4 explainin what it was about cuz in all seriousness u lost me. it was a really cool poem and i could feel the emotion. i just didn't get what u were trying 2 say.
| Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  I think this was wonderful. What a nice poem. I was able to follow along just fine. The imagery was great. And I loved the flow. I can feel the pain with everyword. Nicely done.
| Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  thanks for the comment, nice interpretation, it has several layers of meanings, but the first is about a woman cheating on her husband, and her and her lover killing him, but it also explains the way it haunts her through life.
| Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
  that was rather good. i can't decide whether its the story of a person who is still venting about a bad relationship or of a person who has taken control of his life after being let down and is seeing things through the right perspective.. it just makes it more interesting for me. though the rhyme scheme was a little confusing the piece has a rhythm to it.. quite cool..
| Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by Sanjhana | [ Reply to This ]
  Ah yes, the cheater's heart. Much like Poe - the guilt is going to be the true death of the cheater. That's what I got out of it? I thought the rhyming was pretty good and it seemed to flow well. I liked, "i heard the sound
of lovers broken truth
the cuts will soon
reveal the wound
gagged and bound in doom."
Love,Peace,Joy! tif ; )
| Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  Quite a powerful ending "living with the truth of death it's just a breath away". Beautiful words, and once again, I find myself in envy of your writing. Another close-to-classic yet complete original. Efficacious description.
| Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]

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