Wow. That is so sad and perfect. The ending couldn't have been better. I really love the way you expressed that. I don't even know what else to say. I can give you nothing but compliments. Very beautifully done
This was very sweet. you expressed yourself very well.i don't care about the rythm in this piece.The only thing is that checkign the spelling but i'm probally wrong.othere than that it was good. my fave lines/ stanza
"I like to watch you sleep While you lay so peacefully I like to watch you breathe While you lay beside me
The ceaseless rhythm Reminds me of our love The bond that we share Could never be undone"
well hope to hear from you and keep up the good work.
awww...it was a very sweet poem. i liked the unexpected ending, i defiantly wasnt expecting him to have died...maybe leave but not die. great job. i love the first two stanzas they are so beautiful. great job.
OMGOMGOMGOMG. That was even better! <333 I love your comparisons of heart beats and breaths that are ceasless, like time. Until a person passes away, and the person left behind can only wish to hold the person one more time and to watch them do simple things like breathing and sleeping because they loved them so much. IrapeitandI'mgoingtoaddittomyfavorites.