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    dots Submission Name: the storydots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 547
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 623



    Description:
       I want to know what you think about it, what should I change and what is really good....I ripped a little bit from Eazy-E but I other than that I like it
    hope you do too


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    dotsthe storydots
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    Now I'm'a sit ya down and tell a lil story
    Straight out the can from the strange category
    there is a bitch, ugly one
    just had her 17th son
    She has the balls look at me, says you might be the one
    I put a friend of mine to her head, its called a gun
    With my AK47 pointed to her dome I says, what is it wrong with you trying to take me home
    she said, since you got money and you look damn good, I thought I'd take you home and fuck the wood
    But you know shanx don't need that bitch,
    So I shot her in the face, and my clothes I had to switch




    Submitted on 2005-07-25 13:14:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lord have mercy go for it as I slowly Sratch my head easy-E lord give me bob marley or jimmy hendrix you need your head examed
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Very graphic. And very dark. I see that you have a skill for rhymimg and you are good with the flow part. It was your lyrics themselves. For me it was a bit to strong. If you could maybe tone down the anger in it, you will have the real meaning of your rap, you starting a new life and you have a goldigger in your way. This has alot of potential. I liked the theme of the rap. Nice work.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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