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    dots Submission Name: Paddle Mandots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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       This is the true story of 3 young boys and their epic paddle upstream ~ no children were harmed in the recreation of this tale!

    Really, just watching boys be boys and listen to their stories while they were playing on the river at sundown. Reminds me of why I still let my inner child out to play (or how she lets me out to work!)

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    dotsPaddle Mandots

    "The river is angry
    me friends!"
    For to each himself
    he attends;
    We must become
    the waves today men ~~
    Be happy with your lives,
    not regret of sin.
    Against the tide
    we must go!
    River ~ dear friend
    not foe...
    Bear witness, now,
    to the oar
    Into Love's patient
    arms do soar!
    The ship we sail,
    named "Fate"
    Break ye bread
    It's time we ate.
    Be at one with
    ebb and flow
    We the arrow
    "IT" the bow....
    Paddle sailors,
    Paddle men
    There's naught to lose
    and all to win!

    Submitted on 2005-07-25 13:18:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved this. it was a wise tale about needing courage when you least expect to. And it was a friendly and peaceful read. I enjoyed reading it.
    Your flow was good and easy to follow. Great wording. Great job.
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree completely with sandman. This is a great piece with lots of descriptions. I could picture the whole scene. You were lucky to have witnessed it in person. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      once again this was great all the emotions to a great piece humour love imagery the works your writes are all peaceful and leave me with a picture still hot here in canada hope all is well and thanx for your recent comments i am glad you enjoy my thoughts
    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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