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    dots Submission Name: Prayer Envelopeddots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 951
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 515



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       Love,Peace,Joy!!!


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    dotsPrayer Envelopeddots
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    Surrender me
    2
    the moment...
    Now

    Melt me
    in
    the Sun

    Float me
    down
    Love's river

    Paint me
    with
    Colorful Sky

    Sing me
    a
    nature song

    Reveal me
    an
    infinite Truth

    Strengthen me
    a
    stoic mountain

    Root me
    on
    solid ground

    Surrender me
    2
    the moment....
    NOW




    Submitted on 2005-07-25 14:36:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I ALSO LOVE YOUR STYLE IN THIS POEM. IT WOULD BE A BEAUTIFUL SONG! UNIQUE AND SO INTRIGUING! I TOO LOVE THE LINE "STOIC MOUNTAIN".
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
      holy [censored]. for lack of better words here. but oh wow! Its like one big wish or in your case a prayer. things you just for the moment feel wrapped up in. I supose this will be my new favorite becoz it showed such...well...my minds vocabulary doesnt seem to want to be in good use so you think of a word. but wow a great write this was. keep it up.

    Love from within
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the way you delivered this piece. it painted a picture and was very visual and something you could get lost in. good read and write. havent come across many poems like this which is why i guess why I like it. i would write the now in the last sentence in lower case...i think it just tops off the easiness and flow of the poem. but thats just my humble opinion. :)
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by blackbeauty5791 | [ Reply to This ]
      im so sorry but i wouldnt following it, but its just me i never get pieces this well written lmao!!!! i cant ever get the nature thing, but i know it was more than that, i can say that the flow and format were very nice.... but dont stop writing about these ideas just for me, no matter how many you write ill still comment eventually ill get it enjoyed reading
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the flow of this peice as well as the style it was written. I love the line 'stoic mountian'. It speaks volumes to me. However thoughout the poem you seem to be getting more felt and more demanding, and in the end you caps now which seems to be the climax... maybe there should be a small something after that to bring back the softness... or now just not in caps. Again I really liked the style of this.
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by BeautifulGrace | [ Reply to This ]


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