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    dots Submission Name: Odddots
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    Author: acommoncold
    ASL Info:    23/M/WI
    Elite Ratio:    5 - 78/87/22
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 618
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    Description:
       I am no longer religius in anyway, this poem was about a certain event. Throw in some drama and what nots then you get the idea. I took the "event" and made it into a rather dark humor poem.

    Once again this poem is a very very very very darkened humorous poem. So once again take it as you will.


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    dotsOdddots
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    Ive thought of suicide in many ways
    But none felt better, than that of gun
    To end my coming days

    Forgot what triggered my want of death
    My mind, was confused, abused
    And I sat there hugging the gun to my chest

    Pressed the barrel upwards, to my mouth shaking
    I was going to go through with it
    I knew my life was for the taking

    Pulled the trigger CLICK
    A dud bullet and I screamed Oh God
    Odd though, because Im agnostic




    Submitted on 2005-07-25 15:38:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yes yes this lovely poem, you should really come up with a name for it, you could call it "oh god" or odd, something, ok back to the form. there are no spelling errors the flow rocks! (just kidding don't get mad) you have a very blunt meaning for this poem, and i'd have to say my favorite stanza would be

    "Pulled the trigger CLICK
    A dud bullet and I screamed Oh God
    Odd though, because Im agnostic"

    one because you just hate religion so much and because you are still alive.

    ~liz~
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      'Ive thought of suicide in many ways
    But none felt better, than that of gun
    To end my coming days"

    wow...is gun seriously a good way of killing your self?
    well, i guess because it's faster...but this poem...is ok...i think i like your other poems better though...they have more meaning.

    you were
    hugging the gun to your chest? how gross! jk
    that's a cool picture though...i've watched too many movies and i know what that look like.
    i admit i don't know what "agnostic" means.
    maybe because i'm pacific islander.
    but i didn't get the humor either so i apologize.
    thank you for the poem!

    -fearless
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by Fearless | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, maybe ur NOT agnostic?? Ah well, just a guess...
    I like this poem though because of the way you pulled the readers in with a clear step by step description of your suicide intent, just to crack us up with the last line. At least, to me, it was funny...All that suspense and tension we built up - it would have been funny enough just to read that the bullet turned out to be a dud, but that last line was mint. Very good poem - I liked it... cher
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Inducted_Kitty | [ Reply to This ]


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