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    dots Submission Name: THRASHINGdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       i write alot of hmm lets say racy stuff and they are not always liked i havent posted one here and it is a big deal to me please feel free to say whatever thanks

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    I need you , need you to fill me ,lend me your heat , burn me .I will scream , the way you like. Anything to hear the strap. Fallow me hide here in my ocean, streaks of crimson break the pattern of porcelain. And I love it when you hate me, I want to taste your sweat waiting for your arms to give out from the pain you’ve inflicted. Hear my pleading , tonight you are my god.

    Submitted on 2005-07-25 22:41:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      HOT. I might just use that line tonight...With your permission of course. I suppose perception on this piece might differ from male to female. Being the latter, I like it. I would just organize and give it syntax, and you've got yourself one sexy ass Hallmark card.
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by Twila | [ Reply to This ]
      yep!this is very sexy. its a lil short but its still really good! maybe if u want u could orate this! but u dont have to!hope to read more of ur stuff
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]

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