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    dots Submission Name: LAREMY’S LEGACYdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 409
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 543



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       dont really know where this one came from but please let me know what you think


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    dotsLAREMY’S LEGACYdots
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    Behind her flounders the most cumbersome of skirts , they make an almost too soft swoosh as they kiss the cold cobblestones .Its often chilly in the southern corridor.
    She whispers softly Laremy. NO answer just echo .no answer and no sleep tonight for the troubled. Nothing earthly here to hold .just high walls of cold gray stone.
    She once intrigued the men of court with her deep blue wayward stare. Every magic man from thrown to glen ponder her insanity, and so they come to watch in awe while she speaks to beloved laremy…




    Submitted on 2005-07-25 22:44:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, I really like your work. I like the conclusive ending and word choice. Once again though, I say organize and give it proper syntax. Maybe even more details on her.
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by Twila | [ Reply to This ]


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