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    dots Submission Name: silencedots

    Author: samyalone
    ASL Info:    17/f/my room
    Elite Ratio:    3.85 - 93/67/18
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       this is the revised copy of one of the first poems i ever wrote....i decided i wanted to re-write it, so i did and this is the outcome....i like it better than the original

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    As silence creeps nearer,
    Her memories grow louder
    She thinks of what has happened,
    Of what is coming,
    Of what she’s done.

    The memories grow louder
    As the surroundings grow quieter,
    She thinks of the cruel mistress; nature,
    Of the bloodied sky of that night,
    And “why?” as she stares into Death.

    Friends and family are closer,
    But their number gets smaller
    Silence now fills her empty spot,
    Her best friend is gone, she is to blame.

    She is called and the world comes back
    But the images are still in her head
    Fight them, make them go away
    Because she is you…

    Submitted on 2005-07-26 11:26:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you've done a good job as far as expressing the despair that this person is feeling.. but it gets too confusing at the end... its difficult to grasp what u'r talking about..
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by Sanjhana | [ Reply to This ]

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