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    dots Submission Name: I Aint No Teddybeardots
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    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 422
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 729
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2525



    Description:
       THERE AINT NO HIDING MEANING OR DESCRIPTION BEHIND THIS PIECE,
    YOU LIKE THIS SONG OR YOU DONT


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    dotsI Aint No Teddybeardots
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    Like the game, this boys got dreams
    of pressing rewind, and getting a father
    that aint mean
    Dr. king had a dream, now look where hes at
    But look where we at
    suppression of the truth, It haunts me
    like the curse of ruth, It taunts me
    Never could a white man rap, till they met Em
    When he sided with dre, and Killed kim
    Letting the ink bleed, i will succed
    no matter the fucking numbers against me
    or the haters that wanna see me fail
    Ima bout to bust outta my jail

    So when you see me on the streets,
    just stare
    Dont tell me you know, cause you dont know shit
    Nobody lives the truth i spit
    So when you hear me in your dreams,
    Dont care
    Cause i aint no motherfucking TeddyBear

    You must have me confused,
    with other whiteboys that were abused
    This one lives the nightmare,Fuck Childcare
    Turned from a boy, to someone who stands
    On my two feet, This boy aint weak
    At 15, Im a grown fucking man
    I dont feed on happiness, that aint what i breath
    How many times i gotta say Fuck You
    For you to believe,
    You tell me i got balls
    But do you have a pair
    I done told you once,
    I aint no Motherfucking Teddybear

    So when you see me on the streets,
    just stare
    Dont tell me you know, cause you dont know shit
    Nobody lives the truth i spit
    So when you hear me in your dreams,
    Dont care
    Cause i aint no motherfucking TeddyBear

    How can bitches go all day long,
    Listening to those fucking 50 cent songs
    In da club looking to dance, Fuck that
    I snuck in the club, to beat you with a bat
    Nobody knows Who I am?
    I dont want you to give a shit about
    How I am
    Being Hated on all my life,
    Look where that fire has got me
    Im the king of the nightlife
    Just another pussy thats all I see
    Everytime I look in the eyes
    Of someone who tries to care
    I done told you bitch,
    I aint no Motherfucking Teddybear

    So when it's my time to go,
    Don't act like you care
    Don't cry for someone who wouldnt cry for you
    Cause I aint ever fucking trusted you
    This shit aint for fun,
    This aint no fucking state fair
    Cause for the last time Bitch,
    I aint no Motherfucking Teddybear




    Submitted on 2005-07-26 13:25:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I am so in love with the rawness in your writing. I honestly believe that you are more than capable of standing on your own two feet. You prove it everytime that you post something. I'm not too into the hip-hop scene, but I can totally see how this could be one hell of a rap. Keep writing!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      So when it's my time to go,
    Don't act like you care
    Don't cry for someone who wouldnt cry for you
    Cause I aint ever [censored] trusted you
    This [censored] aint for fun,
    This aint no [censored] state fair
    Cause for the last time Bitch,
    I aint no Mother[censored] Teddybear

    You must have me confused,
    with other whiteboys that were abused
    This one lives the nightmare,[censored] Childcare
    Turned from a boy, to someone who stands
    On my two feet, This boy aint weak
    At 15, Im a grown [censored] man
    I dont feed on happiness, that aint what i breath
    How many times i gotta say [censored] You
    For you to believe,
    You tell me i got balls
    But do you have a pair
    I done told you once,
    I aint no Mother[censored] Teddybear

    those two parts were my favorites. this is a good peice. i loved it! all you rappers on here are great...i love eminem...u really are good at this, u have a gfreat talent, never stop,, u can make it big.
    -Suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well...Um...I respect that you can stand up for yourself and tell the world how life is for you. I didn't really like this one, but it could be because I'm dead tired and really should be sleeping. Anyway, I respect it. Later.
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      "You must have me confused,
    with other whiteboys that were abused
    This one lives the nightmare,[censored] Childcare
    Turned from a boy, to someone who stands
    On my two feet, This boy aint weak
    At 15, Im a grown [censored] man
    I dont feed on happiness, that aint what i breath"
    Very well put - you are a survivor and a strong one and this says it very clear...
    For one not big on rap (I haven't made it out of the 70's & 80's yet) I could start liking it more
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      come on cade lighten up. just kidding. i like the way u tell ur side and that same time u don't give a [censored] what no one has 2 say because their opinions don't mean [censored] 2 u. u keep livin life by ur own rules and puttin [censored] like this on the site.
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the rawness of rap and thought it came across in a rhythmic way. We all deal with our childhood drama in one way or another and I'm glad you can write about being able to move on. Love,Peace,Joy! epiphany ; - )
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I aint a teddy...I'm ya daddy...you ready?
    Open up your heady with a swipe of the michete
    Have your shirt looking something like spaghetti
    As your blood trinkles to the ground like New Years confetti

    Nice [censored] dude. I'm just [censored] around on the subject. I feel ya! I ain't no soft ass either. It's war whenever!

    X
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      hostile flow, kid. you give off that attitude like "take it or leave it". i dig it. you ahve every right to spit what you do. keep it up, the Dsyde lives on~P
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I snuck in the club, to beat you with a bat

    Now, that was a good line. Made me laugh. A very good little diddy you got here. I picked up a beat and rhythm to it. Definately would be easy to turn into a hip-hop type song. Have a good one and keep writin'
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that you can be a teddy bear at times. I have seen a more sensitive side of you.

    15...you have a lot of skills. I am impressed how you actually write it all out like an actual lyrics page. This one to me was a pure example of talent. And this one...you didn't have as much cursing in it...which really made me like it more.

    Excellent job!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      yea this was some hard core crunk type...lost the flow here and there but that is always the case with a lyricists vocals not being heard, only read!...i like the word play and imagery...keep it up!
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by orpheus | [ Reply to This ]


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