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    dots Submission Name: Fuck off (added verse)dots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 447
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1362



    Description:
       I cut out a few fucks...the more i read it the harder it was to keep them...Then I added some in the next verse :)


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    dotsFuck off (added verse)dots
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    Fuck you, fuckoff, fuck everything you say
    Fuck your empty promises, I hate you, but anyway
    Fuck you fuck her fuck me we all fucked over in this world, you see
    I can't seem to get past the past
    so I say fuck you before I blast ya ass
    Fuckk all the people here, and as well as other places
    Fuck the kkk, a shot in the head to every rascist
    this is america, bitch, wat was the civil war about
    learn your history son and then you can come to my house
    I won't tolerate your views if they're not right
    If I gotta deal with you you better be on my side

    Fuck off bitch if you don't like what I write,
    you got a small bark, and you ain't even got a bite
    YOu dont like the way I say fuck like I do
    I got just one thing to say, FUCK YOU
    Why would you think I gonna take that shit bitch
    Be constructive with your motha fuckin Comments
    FUCK OFF!!!

    Cause I'm still sayin fuck off middle fingers in the air
    If you don't really like it, Then I don't really care
    you think its new to me to have people that hate
    Before you think any more, just wait
    I give a fuck if you like me no one ever really has
    Almost all I ever had is my dark yellow rag





    Submitted on 2005-07-26 13:30:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      and i thought i said f u ck alot... lol but the point gets across... and you said you took a few [censored]'s out?!? there are still many more. well anyways ok piece i guess.

    Kiss~
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by Kiss the Night | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! i like the new [censored]! any one who doesnt like this...can [censored] off!they bull [censored] people if they dont like it...hey i may only be 13 but i know what a good [censored] you poem is...and this is the best one ever!u [censored] rock! I [censored] love it!
    -Suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      DD
    You say '[censored]' alot
    I like you
    and you're right
    alot of people need to [censored] off
    I like you and yout tendancy to say [censored] alot because if no one could say [censored] off then all the annoying people would still be hovering over our heads never SHUTTING up
    kinda like me 99.99% of the time
    But I'm not racist..
    so that's good
    I luff it and you need to write more
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by ShadowAlchemist | [ Reply to This ]
      All i gotta say is DAMN. That was hot and i can't even lie about that. You just cussed out most of the people that i don't like. lol keep writing.
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! This is great! Someone is actually reflecting my views on life with perfect wording! Keep it up!
    You were very clear in your point and it's definantly original.
    Good rhyming scheme.
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      damn did u have to say [censored] all them times i guess so i u feel that serious about haha and people thought i cursed alot they sould read that [censored] u kinda go off but its kool i feel u but i like it i like it alot


    heavy knowledge
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]
      Well well well...someone pissed in ur cornflakes today! Ah well, it happens to the best of us.
    I can honestly say that I like this work though, because it is so rude that it HAS to be honest.
    Is she gone yet, or did she hang around til the next blast? Just curious...
    You definitely had issues with someone in your life, and you found a really creative way to put those issues on paper - I bet your keyboard was SMOKIN' when you finished this piece! lol
    ps-hope she is gone, probably is, looking for the BBD...
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Inducted_Kitty | [ Reply to This ]


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