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    dots Submission Name: Everydaydots
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    Author: DrkRomeo_sGirl
    ASL Info:    16/f/somewhere in my mind
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 77/75/26
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1465
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 698



    Description:
       just be honest.


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    dotsEverydaydots
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    Dj,
    I have to say,
    I think about you everyday.
    I found a stain,
    within my heart,
    I think this is a brand new start,
    for me to say,
    what i have to say,
    to my baby everyday,
    when i look into your beautiful eyes.
    I see one thing that i must realize.
    Here on earth,
    God gave you to me,
    and when i'm with you,
    i feel so free.
    And i know you may not know this,
    but i really think your grand.
    And for those who dont think so,
    they just dont understand.
    There is just one thing I have to say.
    Dj, my love for you grows stronger,
    every second of everyday.




    Submitted on 2005-07-26 16:52:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      meh, already read this one
    i'll tell you now what i told you then
    AWESOME
    | Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by XmaryjaneX | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a very very cute poem and i enjoyed reading it. the rhyming fits 2gether really well. its a sweet poem and i love how you show your emotions i can feel it with you throughout the poem. keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by wastedROMANCEx | [ Reply to This ]
      it's good but i think it flows too close to geather with all the rhyming. try going over it again and pick at it a lil,and see if sounds better after changing it around as long as it still has the same efect and feeling.keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by deleted | [ Reply to This ]


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