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    dots Submission Name: Sunset over the Palisadesdots
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    Author: SHRINKSDR
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    Description:
       My porch/deck has a view of the Hudson River.
    The house is high on a hill and when conditions are right the sunsets are spectacular. Sitting on the deck on a wood rocking chair and a glass of wine is pure therapy!


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    Sunset over the Palisades

    Sitting on my porch,
    In my rocking chair,
    A glass of wine in my hand
    A cool westerly breeze
    In my hair
    And the hanging ribbons
    of a Willow Tree
    Shading my eyes.

    Overlooking the Hudson River, a
    Huge orange ball slowly
    Disappears behind the majestic
    Palisades.

    Walls of slate and sediment,
    Chiseled, carved by slabs of ice
    That centuries ago
    sculpted out a swath,
    A huge Path; the
    Hudson valley.

    Watching the lazy current
    Meander, white sails
    Bob and sway, as
    They are carried along.

    The river reflects the
    Tinted red rich texture of
    The shear striated walls
    Of the palisades.

    The sky is a palette of
    Colors.
    The Sun's arms,
    Tendrils of light and hue,
    Reach out across the sky.

    Iím Looking into
    The face of God.

    Feeling the awe, the wonder,
    And asking the age old
    Questions about life,
    Our place in the universe,
    And the grand scheme.

    I am still, serene, tranquil.
    A sense of peace, wholeness
    Has taken hold of me.
    I am one with the river,
    The Palisades, the Beautiful
    Orange ball now disappeared
    Leaving itís afterglow in the Sky,
    And in my soul.






    Submitted on 2005-07-26 19:50:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Steve
    This is a beautiful write where you really capture the essence and beauty of New York
    As you know i am back visiting My Mom in Jersey
    I havent been back to the east coast in 8 years
    This is my Home
    And always will be
    Tonight I am going to see the Rangers destroy the Lightning
    God Its Great to be Back Home
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Steve,
    Very nice, I am still seeing the hanging ribbons of the willow, no not that one...that one over there.

    The sun reaching down with its tendrils of light reminds me of a beautiful sunset just about a million sunsets ago as Queen Nefertiti stood with her daughter Ankhesanamen on the white marble balcony at her vacation villa across the Nile from the main palace in Amarna.

    A light breeze was gently wafting the delicate silk curtains behind them, then it lightly caressed the face of the most beautiful queen of all time.

    Here at the villa, she did not need to shield her eyes as she usualy did watching the sun rise each morning from the palace and could stare more thoughtfully into it.

    Nefertiti wonderd if that splendid orange disk was in fact the god of her husband or not.

    Or was God perhaps by another river on the other side of the world where there were no pyramids, no sphinx and no stone temples of the gods, but stone palisades that God himself, not the pharaohs who preceded her husband, had carved with His very own hands.

    Donn
    | Posted on 2006-03-05 00:00:00 | by D McDaniel | [ Reply to This ]
      amazing Steve, i love the "Leaving itís afterglow in the Sky And in my soul." the majestic beauty of your surroundings and contemplating God and the meaning of life sounds like a perfect day to me. very heartwarming and soul Grabbing poem you are truly blessed in your outlook. this must be a favorite...mike :)
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      Jeezuz, Steve, this is very, very nice!

    The words you've used simple roll off the tongue, and the images are wonderful.

    (tiny typo "palate" in painting is "palette"

    What a bloody pearler! Excellent +

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow steve this is unreal , i was transported there i could feel the wind in my hair its so beautiful , i love the words you use to describe the sky its so vivid in my minds eye , A truly beautiful piece.
    unfortnatly for me i have to come back down to earth to the reality of were i am with the many houses and the traffic noise passing me by.
    take care Lainie x
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by lainie75 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhhh...how lovely! This is wonderfully written and nicely detailed to provide the reader with some really good visuals! Peaceful, relaxing and serene, an escape from stress and tension to just sit and watch, drinking wine, absorbing all the beauty that is before you. Just awesome! And I like the added mention of the willow tree with its "hanging ribbons". I have always admired those trees for the elegance and beauty they have. I love the sunrise and sunset and any time you can combine them with water surroundings you can expect some true visual enjoyment! I live near the ocean and make every effort to capture this magnificent experience whenever I can. I love how the colors of light reflect off the water. Ahhhh...thanks a bunch for giving me some warm sunset thoughts this morning! Much appreciated! This is a very good poem! Well written! Take care!
    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      "Looking into the face of God..." how true. nature can have such an affect on us that way. it's beauty and serenity can soothe the weary soul. this was beautiful and serene. i could see it in my mind's eye as i read it.
    thank you,
    @ Cat
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this, it was truly beautiful. I once watched the sunset over the Hudson river, it was spectacular. It seemed as if you pulled me into a painting. I really liked how you described the sun as a huge orange ball. When I see beautiful things such as sunsets and other things I wonder how the world can just pass them by, Do they even glance into the heavens above them? When I see something beautiful, even if its the most common of things, I put my life in slow motion just to take that beauty and store it in my mind. Well I'm starting to babble so I just wanted to say this was outstanding!
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by MurphyGirl44 | [ Reply to This ]
      i believe that we are blessed for witnessing these miracles...these sunsets that happen everyday and yet not many appreciate. you know what is also breathtaking? sunsets over mountain tops. my aunt had a house that was built infront of a mountain and every evening when the sunset...it was spectacular...
    great piece! love the colors and mood created with your words...

    dylanpoe's girl
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Breathtaking! I could "feel" myself taking in the serene and beautiful scene you've described here.
    Sometimes that's all we need.. just a peaceful place to unwind. Thank you for allowing me to unwind with you as we don't have near as lovely a place here.

    You had me taken in by your first stanza.. and by the last I was in a dream world, smiling and sipping on a glass of chardonnay, taking in the beauty around me.

    This poem itself is peaceful and serene. Wonderful title, so befitting to this write.

    A very enjoyable read. Thank you.

    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Steve
    I watched the sunset on the Palisades and it was nice, but what you have created here is beautiful. This sunset on the Palisades blows my memory of it to shreds. So visual, so colorful and detailed. You have left no doubt to the beauty of this scene...
    Very pleasing read
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece was therapy just to read for a moment! I love nature and the effect it has on a person's mood and thoughts. You did a marvelous job of describing your surroundings and giving the reader a vivid mental picture. I loved, "The sky is a palette of
    Colors.
    The Sun's arms,
    Tendrils of light and hue
    Reach out across the sky, Iím
    Looking into the face of God." Just poignant, truthful and spiritual!
    Love,Peace,Joy! tif ; )
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Too cool! I could actually close my eyes and feel like I was there. I could see the color, hear the river, the rustle of the weeping willow leaves. This was very well written. It has a way of just lazily moving the reader along, allowing us to soak up the colors and feels. Very nicely done. I rated it a five!

    Take Care!
    -Chell-

    P.S. You seem to have found your groove!
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]


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