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    dots Submission Name: Abberant Queendots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Romance
    Total Views: 498
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    Bytes: 583



    Description:
       Abberrant meens straying from the normal


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    dotsAbberant Queendots
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    I'm lookin for an abberant queen, somebody to reside
    With me in my castle someone that I can take for a ride
    I wanna show you shit that you ain't seen before
    and when I leave I want you to call wantin more
    Call me wierd like that, but I'm abberrant you know
    but don't get me wrong I dont want no ho
    I want a bitch, a freaky bitch
    A bitch that knows that if she fucks me I'll switch
    not what I was, But something other
    I'll to shoot him in the dick, then her, I'll smother




    Submitted on 2005-07-26 20:46:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Um, well...I believe the word is "aberrant." So, spell check, because "ho" has an 'E' at the end of it. But I do like "then her, I'll smother." Intresting idea. Keep working on it!
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by Twila | [ Reply to This ]


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