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    dots Submission Name: unknown truthdots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 566
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    Description:
       Do you know what this woman does to get money?
    you should its pretty simple

    come on somebody commment on it...


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    dotsunknown truthdots
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    Wondering what it will be like to be free
    Thinking about what she will do
    day night She Haunts the street
    But she doesn't have a clue

    What it is that she wants
    For something to be easy
    She gives others what they want
    Skin dirty, and hair greasy

    lonely, for nobody likes her
    sad, because she lives in a box
    depressed, for you undermind her
    all this for the purpose of smoking rocks

    maybe she thinks someone will save her
    The truth, it is hidden
    She know the truth it is her word
    but you knowing it is forbidden




    Submitted on 2005-07-26 23:21:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was so good, made me think of a few people I have known throught my life. This is a very real, and raw poem. leaves a bitter taste of what that persons life must be like, thats excellent.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Static | [ Reply to This ]


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