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    dots Submission Name: Glistening from raindots
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    Author: ladyngold
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 585/520/99
    Words: 10
    Class/Type: Haiku/Nature
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    dotsGlistening from raindots
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    Glistening from rain
    golden luminous bodies
    embrace euphoria




    Submitted on 2005-07-27 00:45:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This had a sensual feel to it. I liked the imagery of lovers in the rain, embracing, possiblely kissing...or more. This was just beautiful. I'm a fan of haikus for good now! I truly enjoyed this.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-02-16 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      In a way, I hate this type of poem, only because I have to use more words in the comments than the poem has. *smiles*

    This is an awesome rendition and vision of love.

    It combines the form with tight alliteration. That gives it a great feel in addition to the clear images.

    Glist ... gold... lum...
    That flows like real maple syrup

    embrace euphoria
    I read this line as two quarter notes and 4 eigth notes. I like to play that on a hand drum.
    1 . 2 . 1234

    very, very nice.

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      Great haiku, Cheryl, you leave 'em guessing...a great thing!
    I always reckoned haikus shouldn't describe a picture, they should paint an image, and everyone can get their own image from this one.

    Five Star Haiku!

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      This took me to the rain forest, to skin of color and souls in repose. The lovemaking we didn't see of course, I love to imagine, just the feel of being in this scene. like everyone else does. I have to say the hinted is so much more lovely and beautiful, the abstraction is just right.

    Great job Cheryl, you are the queen of haiku, no doubt, your consistency is amazing.
    much love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Ummm...is anyone looking???

    It reminds me of two golden bodies having sex on the beach (not the drink)...in the rain. Sorry, if I am totally off kilter here, but the last two lines...yup, just like warm soup...HOT, HOT, HOT!
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Maybe it's just me but now I want it to storm really bad....lol

    You know you amaze me my friend.
    The amount of detail you put into such few words.
    I love it!!!!

    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminded me of my Kaleidoscope one - very sensual and colored gold! You have this haiku style down to a tee! Great job!

    Love,Peace,Joy! epiphany ; - }
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      oooh sounds so sensual, in the rain and the euphoria and all. this was so beautiful and simple, just like a haiku should be! great job
    -steph
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by playcrackthesky | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very nice haiku. But if I'm not mistaken the last line is supposed to have 5 sylibles and I think yours has 6. But maybe I'm pronouncing it wrong? Oh well just thought I'd mention it.
    -Caitlin
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by Oli | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooo I like this a lot. It's amazing how much you can say with just a few words. And I think you said it perfectly. lol I'm practically speechless. I usually don't really like haikus, but I love this. Every word is so pretty. Great job
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      this is very sensual yet subtle.. you took me on a journey with so few words. it leaves much to the imagination, which i like. you certainly have a way with the haiku, don't you?
    peace&rain
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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