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    dots Submission Name: Open circuitdots
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    Author: K
    ASL Info:    26/Namibia/Africa
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 183/172/46
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       I have a blogspot. I'm known as Open circuit. I wrote this poem as a first entry to establish what I'm all about. Bridging the gap. Any comments.


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    dotsOpen circuitdots
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    The space between us

    An Open circuit
    Like a link removed
    But without my consent

    A Burnt Fuse
    Without ampere or voltage ratings
    No manual
    How can this space be filled
    To make me complete
    If I don't know what to look for

    Will I have to keep knocking my head
    Against shock inducing spikes
    Or trimmers of over current
    Trying to bridge
    The space

    The Open Circuit




    Submitted on 2005-07-27 05:30:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I hate to see you so down, K... or at least I get the impression that the most passion-inducing thing for you now is dwelling on an ended relationship with a certain woman.

    Seeing this page somehow brought me back at least half a year to when I was so... something, with some girl in particular. Owie.

    I don't know if this will help or if you're even open to the idea but... In physiological terms, love can be reduced to an addiction to certain feelings such as the 'anticipation' of being with the significant-other in question. I'm not saying that this is all there is to love, but it -can- be reduced to this if we want it to be.

    If you want it to be reduced, think about how all of our emotions can Easily become more addictive than heronie. Think about how one day [God willing] you will have another woman who will plesantly fill the vacuum you may now feel after the loss of the last one, and based on this truth/potential: the last one was not unique in this respect.

    There is plenty of reason for hope. Look at the significance of the anticipation. Be careful what you use to fill the void left by her.

    Blessings... and tell me what you think of my thing called The Progress Express if you feel like it ok : )
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by Catalist | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa. I know you siad you wanted overall assesment, but I've got to deviate for a second. This kind of sounds like how my life's going at the moment. I was really close to this one friend, and now it seems like it's been broken by an object (i my ex dating her) and I don't know how to fix. We hung out the one day, but it's been cold ever since. I can't make all of the effort anymore.

    Yeah, so after all of that, I have to say that it's not just my situation, but what the thing really means. I don't know what it was, but the line, "A Burnt Fuse" hit me really hard. Maybe that's why I liked it. The honesty behind it. Or maybe the emotion. I don't know. And I can't believe that those other ten people were so selfish to not write a comment.

    ~Jessica
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by shmuzzelle | [ Reply to This ]
      this is like space odyssey 2001...the journey of man
    the search...and we dont even know what we are searching for....

    I see this as mans search to connect himself to society...to break the hostility...to come in grips with realtiy and fit the puzzle of society.
    it summarizes basically what everyone should be all about...bridging the gap....finding love ,
    twisting strangers into becoming your best friend,
    nice write,
    jcprescott
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by jcpdandalice | [ Reply to This ]


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