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    dots Submission Name: Beautful? (4)dots

    Author: Oli
    ASL Info:    23/F
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 206/211/53
    Words: 14
    Class/Type: Haiku/Mirror or Mask
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       This is a haiku of realization. It is part of the "beautiful?" series. If you read the other 3 poems you will know how hard it was for her to realize her true worth. I made it a haiku because every time I tried to make it a longer poem the feelings didn't come out right. Enjoy.

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    dotsBeautful? (4)dots

    Beauty once hidden
    behind a lie once so strong
    now revealed through truth

    Submitted on 2005-07-27 08:18:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You are so right about it being a realization. It made me think of how a person can decieve you by being something that they are not, and then after you really get to know them you find out that they are not what they appeared to be. Well, in any case, I am going to read the others in this series to see what they tell me.
    Very good haiku here!
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by Doris Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      ooh i like it! and being a haiku it lets you interpret alot more on your own, which really lets me relate a bit more. i think i went through a lot of stages, ya know trying to fit in, beings someone i'm not, then ya know eventually you just realize who you are and that its beautiful. great write here
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by playcrackthesky | [ Reply to This ]

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