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    dots Submission Name: On the Strings of My Guitardots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       The part about meeting him in the crowd was at this concert thing when I first met him...and when it said that he collided with my other half that was my ex boyfriend...but it isn't fair to call him an ex cause he is sooo much more...he's like a fucked up version of a brother to me...but at the time this guy thought that I was with Justin...hence the part where I said my vision was impared...but this poem means a lot to me...it says exactly what I feel...well the ending may be a bit stronger than I am allowing the relationship to be at the moment but thas okay...enjoy and please be nice.

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    dotsOn the Strings of My Guitardots

    I was searching
    and in the garage I looked
    and there I found you

    on the strings of my guitar
    the picture by the bed
    my favorite posters on the wall
    silly bits of you I've kept

    I was searching
    and in the crowd I found you
    colliding with my other half
    at the time my vision was impared
    but I see you just fine now

    on the strings of my guitar
    dropping from every tear
    in the backseat of my sisters car
    my reflection in the mirror

    I was searching
    and in my heart I found you
    I let you in and led the way
    'tread lightly' I said
    and you kneeled down to kiss the floor
    and now you see yourself

    on the strings of my guitar
    the CD player plays a song about you
    in the depths of my heart
    now it won't seem to beat without you

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      You never mentioned who or what you were referring to which i think is the best part of your poem. it made me think of who it is i see everywhere i turn. that person i can see is truly special to you just by reading this piece so of course this was very well done just like your other poems
    in the backseat of my sisters car
    my reflection in the mirror
    i had that same scene myself lol isnt it lovely. Anyway keep up your superb writing.
    | Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]
      Love it. Ya know...you never fail to just make me go..wow...after one of your poems. I like your style of writing. Very nice. Keep it up Jaz. Peace and luv.
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      This gave an insight into the relationship in which you hold. It was good in its' description and I felt it was an honest write. Nice work.
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very good. Strong emotions always bring the best writes. Thanks for putting something so personal out there for everyone to read. I commend you for that. :P
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      hey this was great very powerful images once again great write i dont no if you looked at crazy or quiet room just a thought someone asked me to write
    hope alls good
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      very interesting and honest way of articulating your relationship.. has a haunting but beautiful feel to it, especially in the repetition.

    I love how this person can be found just about anywhere, in your CDS, posters, even dripping from the strings of your guitar. Thats just beautiful, and really shows how much influence and inspiration a lover/friend/partner can be.

    Thank you for the read.

    There is something about this-and for that it is a favourite.

    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by pennyroyal tea | [ Reply to This ]

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