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    dots Submission Name: The Spiritdots
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    Author: poppa jon
    ASL Info:    44 /m /N.E.
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 34/46/8
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 979
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    dotsThe Spiritdots
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    This experience of body,
    Is but a fleeting glance.
    A spirit so contained.
    To live and love and dance.

    Learning through adversity,
    Rising to the task.
    Staying true to ones convictions,
    Is all that God would ask.

    These bodies that we dwell in,
    A mere conveyance for the soul.
    Each and every day a lesson.
    To learn and live and grow.

    Striving for perfection!
    An illusion,Never found.
    Seeing flashing glimpses,
    Like a quiet ,subtle, sound.

    For the bodie is a temple,
    Of the spirit deep within.
    The truest gift of all,
    Is not flesh or bone or skin.

    The spirit deep inside,
    Guides us on our way.
    Always moving forward,
    Should we heed what it will say.

    So feel the flow of Life within!
    It is the music of the Soul.
    Listen for it closely!
    To live and love and grow





    Submitted on 2005-07-27 12:18:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a very nice epiphany of life's lessons and you've conveyed well the prospect of roses coming from rubbish.

    I like that it's a rhythmic rhyming piece and less of a free verse form. I think the continuity of the piece and the expression is much more receptive to the mind and thought in this manner.

    Congratulations on a very nice piece!
    | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by danativ | [ Reply to This ]
      You have done a great job w/ this piece showing how our spirits grow and just how important it is that we do allow our spirits to grow and evolve. I only have one suggestion to make the poem "better." In the 5th stanza use"body" instead of "bodie." That's the only thing I'd change. Great job.
    J
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by bentnotbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      Honestly, it is beautiful. I think you did a great job
    on showing how important and precious our spirit is.
    Our spirit is the part of us that will live on forever.
    I hope to see more of your poems.
    lynn
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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